Tread'd ripples ~

I tread amidst deep contemplation's ripples

alone in past inky passages of desire

impassioned life flows through my veins, yet

I safely wade upon shallow water's glean

reflections of this shatter'd crystal image

resembling the girl I used to be

thunder in my heart, 

immers'd in a cleansing drizzle 

raining softly in my soul

Author's Note

artwork ~ Steve Hanks

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Now this one has passion ---
in the lines of this verse...
I do like the wordage presented...
and the font for once in a life time...LOL...
I was wondering if you wanted to use:
Cleansing... in the second to the last line...
I see you're a Marilyn fan...
Then I am Arthur Miller...hehehe...
she had a fetish for tall men...

[Frieda P]

Wooo score! Ha finally, I got your stamp of approval on a font. ;) Yes, thanks for the heads up, I did mean cleansing, glad you enjoyed. Thanks muchly Art. ;)

[Tina Louise UK]

Loved this one, especially the last two lines..beautiful :) x

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the feel and tone of wandering and thoughts. The rain and thunder can take us to deep thoughts and lost places. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

killer first line Frieda! admirable person who contemplates the ripples ... we are usually so brash in thought and activity ... that tenuto balance between passion and control .. that tantric stance of a thoroughbred quivering at the gate ...

"reflections of this shatter'd crystal image
resembling the girl I used to be"
raises questions for me ... is the shattering something good? or is it experienced pain endured? since there is thunder in the heart and a cleansing ... its all good ... whew!

i think running away with you might be worth the beating ;- } enjoyed this very much! so glad you shared it..
E.

[Spacecadet]

Calming and beautiful write. I love the play on words and how they reflect upon both, the bold and timid side that each one of us possess. Great job :)

[Deron Alexis]

loved this one the vibrant way of youth something to think about
resembling the girl I used to be
thunder in my heart,
golden line really.. pure stuff i'm guessing that girl was twice as much a spit fire

[Gurglesnarch van Caasi]

This is wonderfully passionate with just enough calmness to flow like the water you mention.
I wonder if you meant to use the word "gleam" rather than "glean"?
Great work once again!
Also it seems that if you
type and type nothing on these
reviews, some people seem to think
they will get more points by having more lines
when in fact,
I believe it measures word count instead xD

[therisa]

Frieda, this is the alpha and the omega, of your coming to terms, with the past, present and the future. Having walked portions of this journey, myself, I know, of the pain, you had to faced down to emerge victoriously. Bravo.

[Ghost of Jupiter]

You really know how to deliver a profound and heart stopping poem. This was as lovely as the the crystalline waters you paint within our minds. Beautiful and thought provoking words!

[Angel]

Absolutely breathtaking...

[Scott Metro]

Well...the past is just that...glad you stand today..!!
Enjoyed it.

Scotty