Tread'd ripples ~

I tread amidst deep contemplation's ripples

alone in past inky passages of desire

impassioned life flows through my veins, yet

I safely wade upon shallow water's glean

reflections of this shatter'd crystal image

resembling the girl I used to be

thunder in my heart, 

immers'd in a cleansing drizzle 

raining softly in my soul

Author's Note

artwork ~ Steve Hanks

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Now this one has passion ---
in the lines of this verse...
I do like the wordage presented...
and the font for once in a life time...LOL...
I was wondering if you wanted to use:
Cleansing... in the second to the last line...
I see you're a Marilyn fan...
Then I am Arthur Miller...hehehe...
she had a fetish for tall men...

[Frieda P]

Wooo score! Ha finally, I got your stamp of approval on a font. ;) Yes, thanks for the heads up, I did mean cleansing, glad you enjoyed. Thanks muchly Art. ;)

[Sami Khalil]

The last line was amazing but the whole poem was serene and beautiful...Excellent...:).................

[paddy d daly]

love it, but you know what, you're as mad as a March hare, still you must have some bucket to drop into the well to draw up all those words and lines missus!

[Madalyn Beck]

Wow, Frieda. Absolutely stunning. I was floating on your words of a passionate past. I felt sad yet happy reading this. Emotional and gripping. Excellent! xo :)

[Cryingkate]

This one gives me images of all the clocks striking at once ! No matter the hour they be set.

This is when past present and future meet in the middle of
all the mix emotions of ones life.
So Proud of you Freida, So Proud !
All by yourself you stood in shallow waters
of memories and thoughts,desires and
took charge of who you are and not
what you been through.

You stood on Holy ground when you stood in the shallow waters,
You knew you were safe now
You knew you wouldn't drown,
God I know the meaning of Thunder in the Heart
The Agony...
You stopped the clocks Freida time stood still and you won!
You conquered past present future.
The shatter'd crystal image has won !

Proud to know you and watching you leading and showing all the other shatter'd crystal images how to self repair :-)

[Michael Stevens]

An excellent poem, Frieda!

[s y e]

I think we tread water quite often... sometimes we feel like we're drowning, just barely keeping our head above the water and other times we think we're actually going to be okay. I think it's a bit like a cycle to be honest.
This speaks so much Mama. Just beautiful and poignant.

[redflutterby]

Sigh... too often we tread the waters of our thoughts and painful feelings. Just barely keeping our heads above the surface. But sometimes we get close to shore and our feet touch bottom. We can stand...still surrounded by our minds liquidity...but able to rest for a bit. Then we ponder the reflection before our eyes of what we used to be and sometimes shed a tear for what's lost. Lovely piece and music hun...

[Frieda P]

Sigh, exactly Red...thanks so much for your sweet words my friend...x

[Jack...]

How do I say beautiful in a different way? I am captivated by your words today my sweet friend. They are sad, yes they are, but they are so very enchanting. Gorgeous is another word that comes to mind, but that still doesn't seem to quite cover how your work affects me. Stunning? Extremely stunning, like a wondrous fountain in old Rome washing everything with glistening charm. Still, to find the right words to describe this I am finding difficult. So I will say this...How do I say beautiful in a different way? I'll just say your poetry and leave it at that.

[Frieda P]

I think you said it all Jack, thanks so much for this enthralling review.

[BlackRose]

Speaks of such passion drenched off the palate never turning back. Impure to the senses but pure to the love that ensued. Marvelous as always.

[Frieda P]

Thanks BR...like where you took this one...muchly appreciated.

[BlackRose]

Gee, so thrilled, thanks! Glad you like my little poetic bit. :o) Your so very welcome my dear.

[kublakhan27]

The first four lines sound very much like the plight of a poet...the veins through which impassioned life flows make me think of our pens: a part of us, and the ink our lifeblood. Treading those ripples is vital, for its so easy to drown in that ocean of deep contemplation...someone you know is prone to that from time to time ;P So that was the first part...the second part is about Frieda...the crystal image of your past may seem shattered, yet you walk on with thunder in heart cleansing drizzle on your soul. Everyone that knows you knows that you're a survivor, and this piece is a testament to the inspiration that we can all draw from you...you know how inspirational you are to me :) As Dylan said, you're a big girl now :) xo

[Frieda P]

You know I really like where you took this one Benji, and needless to say I always adore your reviews....you humble me my sweet friend....big girl pants on as we speak ;-) Just saying....grazie mille! xo

[kublakhan27]

I guess I just understand you my dear friend ;) Thank you for writing poetry that astounds me enough to inspire these reviews...you deserve every word of credit that comes your way :) xo