I dreamt...

I dreamt you

        were crying

    upon my face,

                    tears slid gingerly

         down my cheeks

      streaked in poppy's 

                 scarlet blood

                  etch'd a trail 

            borne of thunderous fire

            in defiled lies 

                      mine own eyes

            recognized cause-effect

                        thirst'd in the

 name of the father

                          of holy ghost's 

     spiritless guise  

                               took its toll 

upon

 your gypsy soul 

                                  as  you leapt to 

              darkly unfathomable heights

                

Reviews

[Shirlena]

I don't know why this poem seems to take me somewhere dark and then I looked down and saw the image which made me feel like I was going in the right direction. (This is what I mean Frieda about the images surrounding your poetry. Is this also photo bucket?). This sounds like to me someone bearing the guilt of something. Enjoyed the shadowy depictions this piece creates.

[Frieda P]

Major guilt, I think it goes with the territory when you lose someone to suicide, thanks for your thoughts Shirlena...I don't recall where that graphic came from, sorry.

[Shirlena]

I have heard that is one of the emotions that one deals with Frieda (I'm sorry).

[icelandicblue]

This poem filled with crimson tears wrenches my very soul. I hear your words in the dark. There is no look before the leap and still we hope for the currents to carry them.

[Tai Ryens]

I pictured it all, the way a girl begged for a savior and cried tears of blood, slowly falling apart in front of you before her wandering and lost soul went on to leap onto dark, unfathomable heights: heights that seem high only for her and to no one else, an end, perhaps.
You paint this so poignantly, well done.

[Avinash]

I am speechless and I can only feel this poem, my words are not good enough to do justice to beautiful and poignant emotions fired by your poem.

[stars are far]

That was really amazing..well done

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong words and statements in the poem. I felt the struggle in the words. The poem made me wish to read and know more. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[WE]

beautifully written sad yet amazing

[prachi prangya agasti]

beautifully scripted.... nice work....

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

OMG, so beautifully written Frieda.

Kaze~

[Rachelle]

Sometimes we just have to let the dam break…...

[paddy d daly]

the concept is brilliant yet so sad, the dream of someone's tears on your face portrays how close you were to that someone, and ''the holy ghost's spiritless guise'', great piece frieda....paddy..