WINDS

ITS MY FIRST POEM HERE ,HOPE U LIKE IT

Winds
winds come by,
from here and there ........
Measure it
before dealing with its strength.


See how fast it goes,
so you will know
where to go
and when to slow....


regard your space in it
before crossing your limit

Weight your load
before facing the storm
Check what you know
before playing any role


Be sure of what it is full of
before being close or being far

If you have faced its kind before
do expect almost the same result

When a wind that you like
passes without touching your parts

Save your move and stand tight

its hard to be thrown
an injured bird is easy to be caught

When winds come....
Some things stand others do fly
Once you fly..
ANY WIND WILL DIRECT YOUR LIFE

Some winds are to heal
like the one of the spring
stay close to it
when peace is completely missing

Author's Note

DON'T HESITATE IN PLACING UR COMMENTS

Reviews

[JayceeC]

The last stanza is the best part of this. I know you've used these first lines elsewhere, but it really has a lot of peace and summarized the essence of this entire write for you.

Be sure of what is full of
before being close or being far

These lines are a bit awkwardly phrased. I know what you mean, but they are not saying it in quite the right way and it interrupts the flow of your writing. I am struggling to give you a specific way to change except to take the easy way and add "it" after "What" so that the line reads correctly. Every description I think of right now is too harsh sounding for you poem full of soft sibilance and vowel sounds. This is just some thoughts on this, although I hate to reword and restructure work, especially my older work and will understand if you do not care to make changes. jc

[highthought]

Yes sure I ll add it as u said ..u know having someone to live with the thoughts of ur writing gives more power for the topic u re writing about especially when no coming intrest as what happen very often in living life which we are all in ..so writing could be an ascape from bluffing and cheating and others

[DaltonLee]

Very nice poem

[Apathy To Empathy]

Very well written!
{When winds come....
Some things stand others do fly
Once you fly..
ANY WIND WILL DIRECT YOUR LIFE}
inspiring stanza!! very, truely, well done.

[~Death The Kid~ ☜..]

I like it

[X]

Be sure of what it holds
before being close or far.

If you have faced it's kind before,
expect a similar result

Once a wind you like
passes without touching your parts

SAVE YOUR MOVE AND STAND TIGHT!
ITS A FEAT TO BE THROWN.

an unjured bird is easy to be caught.

[X]

i like the what you're trying to say with this piece : make sure you let the right things influence your life because if you let something take you away from your initial path, you could end up somewhere you didn't want to be. the way you put this into words with a poem is very interesting however, it's a little difficult to read. your words may need to be moved around a little bit, just some simple revising, so this piece can blossom and become an easier read. i found myself having to pause here and there due to the lack of flow and rhythm.

this piece has incredible potential, my friend.

[Stef Outsiders]

Intriguing piece...

[A Risen Heroine.]

This is really good, I like the flow, details and the rhyme.
I'll look forward to read some more of your work.
Great job and thanks for sharing!

~A Fallen Heroine~

[Chelsea]

A neat poem. You really went into a lot of detail about the wind and your imagination.
Great rhyming, flow, all in all well done!