Muse

I'm a poet. He's my Muse.

Darling don't wonder why I'm laughing.

I have made you eternal, that's all.

I have forever captured how you make me beam,

how I felt like a goddess when you held me last fall.

I have preserved your celestial being,

how rainfall resembles your eyes.

I am a water sign and you are the oceans,

and the vapor, the snow and the ice.

I need to explore every inch of your body,

break into your heart, mind, and soul.

The more I can see is the more I can write

and the more about you I can know.

Reviews

[eglantine]

Great two first lines, very casual tone but great meaning. They can stand on their own--I'd cut the last two lines in the first stanza. It'd flow better into the second stanza that way.

"Darling don't wonder why I'm laughing.
I have made you eternal, that's all.

I have preserved your celestial being,"

Cut "the" from the second line in the second stanza.

Thanks for sharing!

[Siegfried]

Nicely external, wanting to know, to explore. A truly delightful voyage.

[...]

This is beautiful :) The first two stanzas are magical but love the whole poem

[sinNsincerity]

This captures one of them thousand lives. This is a brilliant piece in my heart hon!

[Rocans]

This is well done. I wished it was longer though, you writing is refreshing.

[An owl on the moon]

What a beautiful, loving awakening of your soul... of your life through the presence of pure Love. Yes, all it takes is one person to change your world completely. So very glad you found your muse.

[Robert]

Sounds like this person is your inspiration to this lovely poem. Very nice.

[AaronFreitas]

"I need to explore every inch of your body,
break into your heart, mind, and soul.
The more I can see is the more I can write
and the more about you I can know."

Love the poem... love that last stanza the most! Great work :)