My Power

It is a doze of motivation for me ;)

My Power

 

 

Got myself on a right track,

Walking right,

And talking tight,

In the gloom,

I just lose my sight…

 

Burden of guilt,

Within me,

Help me out,

And my burning pride…

 

Spectating God,

As my hands sweat out,

I am losing my grip,

Then I trip out…

 

Cuz’ I just fail,

Every time I try,

My patience run out,

But they won’t stop their pry…

 

My time is up,

Or is it time I start again,

Get my feet back on,

and let my worry drain away…

 

 

 Bursting tears in my eyes,

It won’t matter,

When I boast and break those ties…

 

With my will I can rise high,

And I will win my fight,

With that last sigh…

Author's Note

NOT MY BEST

Reviews

[Delaney]

It shows the struggle you must face with a problem. You will fall, but you must get back up and do it again. At times, you feel it's time to quit, but you don't. Until, you finally succeed. That's true determination. My only complaint is with the phrase, "Within inside." My only issue is it sounds rather redundant, because the first word ends with in, and the next word starts with in, also. Other than that, nice job.

Yours Truly, Delaney

[Gaurav Walia]

What do you think about it now ?

[Delaney]

I think it flows much better now, but you did not have to change it. There was no pressure to alter it, it was just a simply opinion. :)

[Gaurav Walia]

and i took it because i think you were right...Now its better than before...Credit goes to you... Thank You :)

[Delaney]

You are very welcome. :)

[Prritiy]

a poem showing positivity and a will to stand up and Live. liked it.

[Gaurav Walia]

Thank u so much... :D

[Prritiy]

you are welcome :)

[minnie:)]

this is really good, reading this poem shows people how to push through a problem they may be going through
good job:)

[Gaurav Walia]

Thank u minnie

[Just Kim]

I like it, It shows you can pull yourself through a situation when you are
down and out. Well expressed!

[Gaurav Walia]

That's right ...We all should have a same optimistic nature...
Thanks tabbycat... God Bless