Last Night

Last night that I regret..please accept my apologies

LAST NIGHT

 

Last night is,

Which I regret,

The things I said are,

What I regret…

 

Concur to whatever,

You say,

I might not,

Be the one today…

 

But not a quisling,

I can surely tell,

Pouring drops of Love,

In our sparkling well…

 

 

 

 

What a ninny,

Contriteness I now suffer,

Forgive me baby,

I am just a duffer…

 

You filched my heart,

O’ my sweet love,

Just like a dart,

You’re my pretty dove…

 

I hide behind the copse,

Cuz’ I’m only scared,

I might hurt you again,

And the cuteness we shared…

 

 

Guess people make mistakes,

I’m only human…

 

Even though today I leave,

We shall unite,

I want you to believe…

 

Clarions will follow,

A promise I make,

World won’t be the same,

We’ll run without a brake…

 

I’m miles away,

Which hurts,

O’ lord it hurts everyday…

 

 

 

I’d take you higher,

If I may,

Those beautiful words,

I want you to say…

 

You need to know,

That I’m thinking of you,

I deserve to show,

That I love you,

That I adore you… 

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

A cluster structured write of self-realization :) good one :)

[Gaurav Walia]

Thank u pal

[Prritiy]

a write full of love, realization and repentance. liked it.

best wishes

[Gaurav Walia]

Thank u so much Prritiy

[Prritiy]

you are welcome :)

[Flutterby aish]

To be true............I Liked it! I don't know why even if it was a bit confusing....I still liked it! i feel you did a great job......n......I ACTUALLY Liked it!!! :p N in the end.....:p :p :p I SERIOUSLY LIKED IT!!!!! ;D

[Gaurav Walia]

Thank u so much. It means a lot to me :D

[Flutterby aish]

Welcome!! :D

[Flutterby aish]

Welcome!! :D

[Akashi]

Excellent job, but I was kind of confused....but anyway wonderful piece.

[Gaurav Walia]

Well I did try to accommodate some part with 'Out of the Context' lines but it seemed fine to me...
Thanks for your valuable review. I'll try to do better next time ... :D

[Akashi]

Thank YOU, my dear. But you're welcome anyway....

[Baby Ricochet]

Interesting if slightly confusing lay out. Good job Gaurav

[Gaurav Walia]

Thank you so much, BR.

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

A wonderful love poem to address the beloved in these beautiful metaphors. I like the imagery and idea that gives this piece a continues rthym to read it all the way.

[Gaurav Walia]

Thank u so much, Sayed