Other Eyes

Other Eyes

There she was standing in isolated space - surrounded by surrealists,

But twisted fate led him to notice her across the crowded room,

Tentatively he approached her - still unmoved by her smile,

His heart found an easy rhythm, as he anticipated them alone.

Strangers they were - strangers they may remain, hesitant of one another,

Finally, he breathes - after feeling like he was suffocating in a sea of people,

She showed interest in him because he stood out from the rest - with his mysterious face,

At first, they couldn't hear over the cacophony of noise and voices surrounding them.

Despite it all, it seemed a good way to start or at least continue anyway,

They talked, they united, they laughed - up until…

Until she saw him looking once too often - disrespecting her nature,

She told him "face up here" but his eyes kept diverting to them - her other eyes....

3/11/2018

Reviews

[Donna]

I don't see a problem with it, actually I think its a compliment!

[Ghost]

You are the first one who thinks its a compliment... As I said I was trying to be a little humorous.. But thank you for such a wonderful compliment on this write..

[sette]

well what more can I expect from men? their riveting eyes which makes me smile upon reading your poem. I have my best buddy as an example so I don't wonder anymore.

[Ghost]

Thank you for your comment... I know it is a typical man thing. Sorry from one of us men..

[sette]

don't be sorry i am so used to my best buddy, it is no longer strange to me

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

lol- typical men- good thing I don’t have that problem- well written and could feel the atmosphere where your poem was set, enjoyed it🌹

[Ghost]

Thank you.. I was hoping for a little but of humor but tried to make it realistic.. And I know us men are typical.

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Lol..my pleasure🌹

[Neville]

And so they would under the circumstances, I should imagine. A surreal write if ever there was & certainly caught my eye.........Neville

[Ghost]

Thanks you Neville. It's ashamed men have to be like this. It was a little different write and again I tried to touch base on issues and hope for a little humor.