Emotions - an abstract fallacy

after reeling through so much of turmoil i have really started questioning the existence of emotions ...

"I am emotional too" is what thou say
Yet compassion is a forbidden virtue , thou always portray .

Herein lies a person who cried his heart out for your sake
Did you by any means gauge his tears to be fake ?

You help others with complicacies in their love life
Then why is it that you let your own , get replete with strife ?

Love isn't a child's play ; in the course of our lives its presence does matter
Yet with your own hands you shatter his dreams that he had showcased before you on a platter .

Mistakes he has done , none of which he denies
The punishments are but being overdone , as silent tears he cries .

You bring him in , just to throw him out
Time and again obliterating him , as if he is a wretched lout .

How can you forget the times when he stood by you
Except out of love , what else is there to construe ?

Today as he is battling to somehow stay alive
All he gets from you is a token of painful jibes !

Truly emotions are an abstract fallacy , a wholesome lie
Rather than get intertwined in this web , i would have preferred to simply die ...

Reviews

[Dinesh Sairam]

"Compassion is a forbidden virtue" - Well put ;) But avoid repeating words atleast in the consecutive lines (Thou) :)

Second line of the fourth stanza was too big, you can shorten it, just so it fits in with the other lines.

"Emotions are an abstract fallacy" - Though I don't accept with the fact, I should say it's beautifully written. :D

Lastly, the message is easily conveyed.. and that's what one wants from a poem (Apart from the imagery and rhyme, of course).

PS. I love using archaic words too ;) If you're interested, go here : http://phrontistery.info/archaic.html :)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

you flesh out the concept of the emotional vampire~ the careless user~with heartwrenching clarity from the perspective of victim~

[Dani]

I can understand the words you write. I can almost see a soul fearful to trust because of being hurt before. I too have let others use my compassion as a weakness. One day I will meet someone that can trust, and be completely honest, as well as you. The pain shared is pionant. D

[*~Kristy~*]

Your a very good writer...