The journey

hope is a good thing ; probably the best of things and every good thing is mercilessly butchered to death :D

Life is a mystic journey , with illusions aplenty
To live a simple one is what we crave
But like a twitched fork , it always behaves .
A linear sequence of scares awaits
To take them head on is what everyone hates .
But the bountiful of pleasures that lies before
Lures one and all to nullify the threats , whilst moving ahead .
At times we find ourselves in despair
With no one to speak to, no one to share .
In times like these , life seems to be a curse
Perhaps for the misdeeds of our previous birth .
To get respite from the turmoil that keeps unfolding
We either drone in pain , or keep on playing the blame game
Despite all this , we keep striving and making efforts
Our souls giving the backup , a gleam of hope doing the patch up !!
This is how life turns out to be
Springing surprises mostly during times of crisis .
To stay alive is all we need to do
Cause the basic fact remains the same , it ain’t anything new
" It’s the love for your life , that will always see you through "

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

At times we find ourselves in despair
With no one to speak to, no one to share .
In times like these , life seems to be a curse
Perhaps for the misdeeds of our previous birth .
To get respite from the turmoil that keeps unfolding
We either drone in pain , or keep on playing the blame game
Despite all this , we keep striving and making efforts
Our souls giving the backup , a gleam of hope doing the patch up !
This is exactly how i felt today,there are many a times i feel,as if i am carrying scars on my soul of a past life..but to voice so would be called silly,yet when life throws you in pain,angst,sorrow again and again,you tend to question yourself why me??..
Very weel expressed and i loved the way it ended on a positive and universal truth which we tend to forget and ought to be reminded.

[Dinesh Sairam]

If I were to re-arrange this poem into sentences, I'd say this is an epic work. But since, this is a 'Poem', I unfortunately look at the theme and format too (Though imagery is what I always see first, which is in lust numbers in this poem, don't worry about that). I suggest it to be a sonnet, or at least in some meter (Suggestion : Iambic pentameter) or if you really would go to alter this remotely (Which I'm sure any poet wouldn't, lol), you can make it a double-etheree. Again, these are just suggestion, the poem is great just the way it is. I guess the suggestions are to make it all the more perfect :) Kudos.

Keep writing.

[SamBug]

This was practically amazing. You used the write words and imagery to make me see this all in my head. Amazing job!

[deeps]

To stay alive is all we need to do
Cause the basic fact remains the same , it ain’t anything new
" It’s the love for your life , that will always see you through "

I love these lines here. This is amazing

[Dani]

" It’s the love for your life , that will always see you through " I Love this. It speaks of truth. Hope wains, but faith, and belief in love endures. D

[Albatross]

Is hope a happy outlook? That seemed to be at least part of the message.

I believe less in hope, which is somewhat compressing in a way, and more in the fact that I should carry a happy paradigm of life... If you don't mind my asking, why do you believe hope is not a good thing?

Very nice poem, thought provoking, inspiring, and touching. I love your sense of wordplay, beautiful. Thanks for sharing:)

[clauds294]

This is a very touching poem, though you may not believe that hope is a good thing, it gave you an awesome poem.