your life & you!!!!

Things may be wrong,

But finish it like a song,

People may be right,

But don't take them lite,

Your path may be correct,

But think before you select,

Situations may get dramatic,

But don't let it last to pathetic,

Your heart has chosen you to breath strong,

So live it fully & don't let it get wrong....!!!!

Author's Note

our life makes us stand,fall,joy,regrets and what not but its all about how you take it and make it....

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your poem has a good message & is well-written, with an interesting structure where each two lines is designed to go together. My only drawback is rhyming. As with other poems of yours, sometimes you are stretching to get a rhyme. You change the meaning or the correct usage of words, just to get the rhyme. Rhyming should never be more important than saying your message with clarity. Thanks for sharing.

[gunjan]

Thanks for your view but i really love to rhyme my words and when i write i just write with a flow so the thing which you said don't even come to my mind but sure i'll keep this in mind from now to write the best ever....thanks for the direction...

[barleygirl]

I understand . . . I've been accused of stretching for a rhyme many times *smile*

[An owl on the moon]

You bring such a strength and musical flow to your thoughts. There is a very hopeful light that grows with each line, and you end with an absolute fire of energy for living. Excellent!

[gunjan]

Thank you so much!!!!

[TheMalady]

That is true! Life is not always in our favor, especially with the downs that we have experienced. Your poem explains them all, how to stay strong and to be optimistic all the time. Thanks a lot for sharing your poem! I love how you rhyme your words. It's perfect and this will serve as my mantra during my dark days.

Thanks a lot for sharing this. Keep on writing! ;)

[gunjan]

thank you for giving time to read my poems...

[TheMalady]

Aw, you're very much welcome. Anytime. Just do send me a read request! :)

[Solar]

A worthy message in this poem,
A few suggestions, if I may:

Situations may get dramatic,
But don't let it last to pathetic,

[gunjan]

thanks....and i hop i relate my writing to every ones life...

[Solar]

i 'hope' so too - keep 'hopping' :D

[gunjan]

short but a meaningful statement of life....