Heartbeat.

That cool Saturday night, 

I rested my lamenting head

     on your chest, and

My pillow had a heartbeat.

I memorized, analyzed.

Chose never to forget its music

"Thud-thud, thud thud."

In one more full moon I'll never hear it again.

That'll be the end of dumb arguments
And bad movies
And jealous speculation of
True thoughts we keep hidden, locked inside.

But the heart cannot lie.

I heard yours tell me the truth I craved.

I'll cling to it for now:

"Thud-thud, Thud-thud
I-do, love-you
I-always, was-true
I-won't, for-get
The-taste, of-kiss
And-our, shared-bliss."

[Yeah, your heart speaks in poetry.]

Reviews

[Silvia - Scribo, Ergo S..]

... and my pillow had a heartbeat - what a wonderful way of putting it!

Splendid little love poem! Love it. xxx

One thing though: Maybe I just need glasses, but the script is so small, I had difficulty reading it. One size larger maybe (for old bats like me)?

[Jason]

Aw, this was sweet! Spoken in true love-poetry fashion. Great write, congrats on the contest.

[Lauren Burch]

I absolutely love the last few lines there. It was naturally read in a heart-beat. :D
Wonderful job. Definitely a finalist.

-Lauren Burch

[K]

This poem made me smile. There are some really great lines in it, my favourite being, 'My pillow had a heartbeat.' and the final one. The rhythm was great as well because it worked well with the subject of the poem, the heart. Great job!

[Charlotte Young]

I enjoyed your poem. Thank you for sharing.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

This is wonderful - how sweet and loving this is! One of my favorite things to do in the world is to rest my head on a man I loves chest! There have been a few. My kids would do that with me when they were little and still when looking for comfort will do that.... you are 100% correct - the heart does not lie and it does speak in poetry - this is going in my favs.

Can't wait to read more of you.

Like your music selections as well and would die without music myself! Read something of mine - thanks!

Kath

[Marie]

Nice job.

[Emily B]

Heart-felt and reminiscent. Aching and longing in every word. Depicted in such a unique way.

[Imperfection]

This was unique.
The part about the hearbeats speaking in poetry made it so.
I'm going to try and learn the language :-)

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

so sweet, i enjoyed reading this one a lot... nicely done...
i like that you type in the heart beats -- the thud thud's :)

[Celtic Cat]

oh how sweet: yeah your heart speaks in poetry. Love that sentiment, and the breaking down of the poem into heartbeats. This was a sad tale just based on the description alone, but you nailed it in with your poetic cry. I love this piece, but I'm sorry you had to feel it. Peace, Cat