poem: Acknowledgment

so this is like trying to fold

      a spring breeze

   into a kite

 

and flying it into a hurricane.

   in Afghanistan, they coat

the string with glass, so it cuts.

 

      I thought once I had an idea

what the hell I was doing.

    I forgot what a sense of humor

 

that b***h of a manager really has.

 

all my carefully drafted notes

       sketches, equations, time tables-

    useless now. I knew how

it was supposed to happen,

 

   d****t. Had it all planned.

I, the martyr, waiting patiently

       for one who would never show.

 

Gave me poetic license, you see.

 

    Three words from you-

   I come to an abrupt standstill-

 Continued inertia flinging things

      off- clothes, ego, dust mites.

 

and here I am.

 

   Staring, naked, at an empty page,

a sky without kites.

      realizing-

just how empty it has been.

   

 

 

Reviews

[Corset]

This has a few buzz words in it that rips my heart out, so please just roll me out the door when the blubbering gets too loud...this place will be the death of me yet, this poem...is killing me and you will please forgive me should i bleed a little on it...as I wish someone had written something along the lines of this for me. You are an immense talent Marie...to make me cry is not an easy feat...and you won't knowwhy, but this effected me in ways I can't explain. just..thanks for writing your words for me to form them into my mind just for me, lol. this is for me right? lol, jk...I loved the b***h of a manager line, ahhhhhh that's ...where did that come from? I wish I could explain...better, why this moves me so.

[Marie Anzalone]

No worries, Corset. You are free to express yourself on my page any time. A small handful of writers on here have made me cry, too, with their works. dana had me bawling one full morning, for things I had no words to express. I may not know your story... but I can guess its nature, based on the content of this work. Unrequited love is tough on the soul. I wrote this for everyone who has ever been afraid to accept a hand offered to them, even if for just one dance. It gets cold and lonely, slowly, out there. You often don't notice it until so much time has passed. You turn around, and something vital is gone. One of my best friends here left the WC today, too. I am saddened beyond words. He had unknowingly helped inspire so much of my work. I am glad I told him, before he closed his account. Life is like that- you have to take chances in love, even if it is just to tell a friend how much they mean to you. That you love them for who they are, not necessarily even who they are to you. A few Soemones did that for me recently, and kept me here. This was written for one of them.

[LJW]

Thanks mega intelligent and poignant scientist lady girl friend.

[ChemicalMadness]

Where oh where has my once love gone??? As soon as love is gone (or refuses to be found), we realize we never knew anything at all...which usually means we didnt know ourselves as well as we thought. And it's always hard to find a place the first time, especially without a map; or, at the very least, some breadcrumbs.

CM

[Marie Anzalone]

Ah my dear CM, perhaps I was too circumpsect in this one? The only thing that strips you more bare than love leaving you, is that same said trickery thing sneaking up and finding you and biting you on the a*s to let you know it means business. You have everything planned out, and then, soemoen sees your plans, and decides to mess with you. Simple as that.

[ChemicalMadness]

No, not circumspect at all...I was a little too quick (thick?)....it's clear now. Those three words. Laid you bare. Exposed your plans as fraud in the face of....well, words. And breath. And life. Cheers to you! Lovely.

[Peter H]

awww writers block from a lack of inspiration with a tragic orgin to the epidemic here

[Marie Anzalone]

thnaks, Peter.. actually, this has nothing to do wih recent events here... this is my screwed up attempt at a love poem. Or soemthing along those lines. I am not right in the head. Thanks for readign/ reviewing!!!

[Peter H]

its alright you can talk to me about it if you like ........... lol i'm happy to review you btw :)

[Marie Anzalone]

thanks for both your review, and for the offer of friendship, Peter. Both of these things are treasured