Such an ingenuous way of putting each of your ten words .. from no. 5 down it's set perfectly.
To be able to plant a tiny seed then let it grow into a ten word plant is quite something, and each having quite a profound meaning or clear picture. Your snatches of humour are great, smiled at, ' You have a very bright future ~ writing other people's rejection letters. ' (ouch!) and 'Because you have declared you need any spot ~ upon which ~ I was gonna sit.' ... and then i felt sad to read, 'I'm sorry that ~ when growing up ~ you only got hugged ~ when you were ill.'
Not sure about the sub-heading of this but the ten words are superb English, 'Half-truths and oversimplification ~ exalted as the reason ~ for distrust of knowledge'
Such an ingenuous way of putting each of your ten words .. from no. 5 down it's set perfectly.
To be able to plant a tiny seed then let it grow into a ten word plant is quite something, and each having quite a profound meaning or clear picture. Your snatches of humour are great, smiled at, ' You have a very bright future ~ writing other people's rejection letters. ' (ouch!) and 'Because you have declared you need any spot ~ upon which ~ I was gonna sit.' ... and then i felt sad to read, 'I'm sorry that ~ when growing up ~ you only got hugged ~ when you were ill.'
Not sure about the sub-heading of this but the ten words are superb English, 'Half-truths and oversimplification ~ exalted as the reason ~ for distrust of knowledge'
A unique form and not a whining rant either.
You mixed up the emotions so well: gaunt and funny.
So cool.
What is all you want?
Most desire a person with ample funds
so they can do as they please and
not work. Not you I believe.
Hugs, Jack
The one that, in my opinion, has the most impact is the metal coat hanger one. I literally laughed out loud when I read the turn signals one, because that hit on my #1 driving pet peeve! Numbers 5 and 6 seem to contrast each other in a very interesting way and are both beautiful in their own ways (not the person you describe in #6, just the succinct way you described him).
This was really cool, your mix of personal experience and growth and philosophical out looks in short verse was brilliant, and that you added in some fun was cool... 9 and 10 were hilarious.
A wonderful read.
Interesting to capture experiences in such few words... You stir emotion with the shortest sentence...
Reminds me of those essays 500 words or less and I thought those were hard.
Number eleven might be an issue I have... There's something about growing up with disney, vampires and the like that raise expections of finding that perfect stalker...Ok creepy maybe lol!
Bilingual (English and Spanish) poet, essayist, novelist, grant writer, editor, and technical writer working in Central America.
"A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to ta.. more..
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