My Ocean.

             I'm drowning.

 

             Suspended

 

             Weightless

 

             The world is silent.

 

             The light has no source.

 

              It's just... there.

 

              No panic grips me, though.
                      Only uncertainty.

 

                Which way is up?

 

                            Or better yet,

 

                 Which way is right?

 

 

                      I need to breathe.

 

                      I need an answer.

 

                        Now.

 

                                Before I lose.

 

             It's slow progress
                If any

 

              But I can't give up.

 

       It can't be for nothing.

 

        It can't.

Author's Note

Questions? Concerns? Advice?

Reviews

[musical-waltz]

I like it. I like your poems actually. They are great. :) and thanks for reviewing my poem. I look forward to read your other poems. :)

[Constance L. Hartwell]

I felt the intensity in each word. It was powerful and full of emotion. There is no advice I can give you. As long as your words are honest and come from the heart, you are fine. With practice you will achieve great success. Kudos

[tarasov]

i like the beginning just describing the ocean. it's nice. it's ends pretty well too. good job...:)