my only two sentences

my only two sentences

A Poem by ∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

I wish you would treat me better
I would've want you in my life
I almost loved you, its a good thing I didn't
the only feeling you have was pure hatred

you treated my family like crap
you never cared about my illness or fever
I will make you pay for the things you done to me
alll you want to do is ruin our family and be a jerk
my heart is better without you, it will always be
never in my life will I call you "father





 

© 2012 ∠( ᐛ 」∠)_


Author's Note

∠( ᐛ 」∠)_
I know that this is a short poem, but I tried my best to come up with a poem. This is a poem for a jerk (cough) *sshole '(cough) that lived in my life 6 years ago.
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My dad had the same issue with HIS dad (I don't think he saw or heard tell of him past age six) so I totally understand where you're coming from here...he was a stronger person because of it though...and I'm sure it will have the same effect on you though you're already a great writer so it probably already has :) 100^^

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

7 Years Ago

Thanks ^_^
kublakhan27

7 Years Ago

No problem :)



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Yeap he,s a jerk, nice flow of emotions, loved it!-- your teady bear

Posted 6 Years Ago


ammmmm.i've never read a poem like this before."i mean the theme".it is serious;y painful that someone who is bestowed with a great title should be treating his own kind in such a rotten way..........anyway.i liked this poem a lot.and the way you wrote it touched my heart..and the title is too nice ......highlighting out that two sentences in the midst of your poem.it is a really very appreciable work!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

6 Years Ago

Thanks.
WOW LOOOOOOOOOOOOOVE IT.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very strong feelings are portrayed. Interesting use of font sizes as well. Good job.

Posted 7 Years Ago


∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

7 Years Ago

Thanks ^-^
Very interesting style of writing Two lines. Like it.

Posted 7 Years Ago


∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

7 Years Ago

I'm glad you liked it ^_^
I love this poem. Relatable sad and just purely awesome.

Posted 7 Years Ago


∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

7 Years Ago

Thank you ^.^
Yes, well said. Love the ttwo sentances. Though this is def. not a happy poem. But so well written:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

7 Years Ago

Well, I'm not used to happy poems because mostly its more about sadness... Thank you :)
First off, this poem is great. To me, one short poem that's really good is better than a really long poem that isn't as good. I especially like how you made some words bigger to form another sentence. I am sorry about your dad, by the way. I don't mean to sound creepy (sorry if I do) but if you ever want to talk, message me. I like to help people :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Isobella Rose

7 Years Ago

No! I was saying that it was good the way it is! Sorry if I made you confused :(
Isobella Rose

7 Years Ago

I meant that a great short poem (like this one) is better than a long poem that isn't as good
∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

7 Years Ago

Oh, Okay thanks ^_^
Sadly I know how you feel

Posted 7 Years Ago


∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

7 Years Ago

A lot of people can relate this.
Btw thanks for reading.
Bluefire

7 Years Ago

No problem. Its a good read, great job.
I am sorry! I haven't felt like this myself, but my mother has, so I know how it can affect people. If you wanna talk, message me :-) I love to help people!

Posted 7 Years Ago


∠( ᐛ 」∠)_

7 Years Ago

Thanks for reading ^_^
I'll message you when I have a problem :)

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