Eraser 11 am

 

 

It was like an epiphany

the moment we fell

"in love"

with the black horizan

you showed me

that diamonds will burn

if left in the sun

and words on paper

will bleed

if wept upon

time can be powerless

considering we are just human

 

 

 brainless

 

 

 

reckless

 

 

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Reviews

[Moflo]

Love it, Muse! The title is interesting, made me go back and re-read. This piece speaks volumes of heartache, but heartache in retrospect, heartache as if had by someone who is almost happy for the experience. The piece is powerful in deed and right to the point. Really good writing here!

[Steven]

This is great. It might even improve with a scalpel:


I had an epiphany
the moment we fell
in love

the black horizon
showed me
that diamonds will burn
if left in the sun
and words on paper
will bleed
if wept upon

time is powerless
to consider
we are just human

it
is
brainless

reckless



Just my two old pennies. Good stuff.

[Muse]

I like your spin too. :))

[Steven]

Well, when something's good you can shift the parts and still have something good ;).

[Vria P Crow]

VIDEO

1. Enthralling
2. Mind Fudge
3. Confusion


e x o t i c
p o e t i c
i n t e r n a l
p s y c h o l o g y
h e l l
a m e n
n a r o t i c
y e l l o w

CONTENT

I see the simple nature.
I see the beauty.
I see the potential.

love,
ria

[Muse]

awesome review...thank you

[Vria P Crow]

You are welcome:D
Remember to be firm with me.

[Aethereal]

This is a very dark, but well structured poem. Without light we'd never see the true beauty of a diamond, but too intense a light would burn it. Words inked on paper would have their ink bleed in contact with tears. Love should only be practiced in moderation as with all things. Immoderate people are brainless. Love is a bond that's neither too tight nor too lose so as to allow freedom. If love were anything other than moderate, it wouldn't be love; it would be a violent painful obsession, a black horizon, instead.

[Muse]

Thanks for visiting my work...I will most certainly return the favor soon. xo

[s y e]

Wow. I loved this, I think it's one of my faves of yours! I mean, the way you write with such passion and honesty. The thought that goes into the structure and format and you try to make it interesting for the reader.

You had me hooked! Amazing job. Well done, gorgeous.

[Muse]

Thank you sweetie...very few will ever realize how personal this series was for me....I revealed the darkest and most human part of me.

[s y e]

I can tell, you poured your heart into this one and it was really effective. I think you done an excellent job o it and giving us a littke insight to your darkest moment was brave. Not a lot of people would do it and with so much detail!

Well done gorgeous.

[Zelle]

its short n fab! keep up d gud wrk!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The importance you place on the single word for wor blow of your thoughts is striking and telling, well done, good read.

[An owl on the moon]

This is like a ravaging liquid that goes straight into the bloodstream. Reckless indeed. And perhaps we are more than just human. Poetry is so divine.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

A brilliant way of expressing words, pure and simple. Well done. One of my favorite songs by NIN.

[N!LoC]

wow... this is artistic on a whole nother level :-)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

all the hair on my arms stood up when I read this fantastic piece. I have been basically uninspired to write but after reading this, I am inspired again. Thank you! Love ya!

[Muse]

luv you too..xo