I almost knew you......

It's seven o'clock in the evening,  the sunset made fair

I was passing by when he waved me over to his porch

despite the random acquaintance he offers me to warm up a chair

then as an icebreaker he offers me a puff from his cigar

smiling now,

I carefully accept from the stranger that sat near, yet far

the first drag in I can taste the nicotine and his toothpaste

handing it back over, he once again deliberately inhales,

he seems to savor and appreciate the juices I placed

then I take a drink from his glass, leaving my lipstick behind

the air around us now mixed with his cologne and my flowery perfume,

with a soft breeze, our scent gets carried away with each puff of smoke

invested I am in the awkward yet casual conversation,

I feel his gaze start with my girlish lips,

down to the curve of my feminine breasts and hips

I feel his eyes undressing me with each word that he spoke

blushing now, I hint that I want another sip from his glass

he agrees, still laughing from the recent joke

my lips make it to the rim, nervous, the Merlot drips down my chin

I use my fingertips to gently wipe and lick it away

he's still watching me with a charming and handsome grin

boots begin tapping as he reclines and stretches back,

and after another flirting glance, we start conversing again,

my mind now tracing the lines that shape his masculine face

wondering how he might feel against my soft skin

hot and flustered by the vibration within

confused by the pulsating rush, I finally realized it was my phone,

 

a call from Sue...........

 

"Where are you?" she asked.

"We've been waiting!"

 

Both of us disappointed with reality

he gets up to shake my hand and say goodbye

sharing the cigar and Merlot I thought,

 

       I almost knew you......................

 

Reviews

[quinfinn]

oh, hell yes! those almost encounters are the most fleeting and tormentative in retrospect.. what if.....? thing is though, i think that most of the time we are fortunate things ended where and when they did, after all, things always happen for a reason. or do they? provocative and relevant. very compelling write!

[Muse]

thank you...I couldn't agree more.

[quinfinn]

welcome....

[Paul]

This is great poetry. Excellent use of non-verbal communication for imagery. Captures the mystery of attraction, and the way it can so quickly be kindled. The pace moves the reader along effortlessly. I also love the interruption at the end. So true to life, and makes for a very compelling piece.

[R J Askew]

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The language is very suggestive with 'drips down my chin/fingertips/wipe/lick' all being erotically vivid.
The boots tapping, like the toothpaste earlier is a vivid dab.
And then she is on the edge of fantasy, wondering how he will feel. Ach, the vibration makes us wonder if her fantasy has got the better of her! And then the twist, the phone as reality shatters the fantasy. A brilliant tease from start to finish.

[R J Askew]

A masterly tease, laden with hot little triggers and fruity innuedos. There is an innocence about it, but we are left in no doubt that there is also a strong lustful intent in play.
The cigar cld not be a more phallic or devliishly sinfuo and sinful of symbols. We can tast the nicotine and -- a lovely stroke this -- the toothpaste.
The two instantly seem to be involved in a conspiracy of equals, with the the words 'handling' and 'deliberate' working well.
Things progress rapidly to 'savouring' and the word 'juices' is of course uber strong.
This dab is also very strong 'air around us now mixed.' It is as if the very air is already coupling, urging them on.
We feel his eyes working on her, but on this occasion the undressing of eyes is not unwelcome, quote the opposite, with her craving 'another sip' of his juice, sorry, Merlot.

[joshua deathdealer]

I love this write Muse. Feels very real and comforting. I love the story and the imagery. Excellent work..xx

[Kenneth The Poet]

I like this one. Very seductive, and yet I love how it ends because life never gives the storyline the proper burial it deserves.

[nothingnothingforgetfor..]

The moments that escape us especially at those inconvenience times. They can be such a pain..

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The scene really played out in my mind with your vivid descriptions... oh those almost moments in life. Nicely done.

[An owl on the moon]

There is that dancing tension of being.. that sweet moment in life that leaves one ever wondering, what if... Those moments smile us and haunt us, and yours quickens in the sensuality of sips and cigars.. and those staring glances that trace one like fingers. Brilliant...

[Liza]

the tension building was superb from the title - the word "almost" is a trigger for that - smooth flow all throughout - wonder full

[Joel Junior]

nice