My Mistake

It describes how someone thinks of herself as stupid for falling for someone who'll never love her back.

I could never define what I feel for you
Could this be love, I ain't got a clue
I'm craving your presence more than anything else
Is this infatuati0n, i couldn't tell
One look from you is all it takes
To wash away all the doubts that my heart makes
You're the only thing I pray for every night
but 'WE' cannot be, I know this ain't right
I love you, you love her, you we're meant for each other
i would smile at you and say "you two look good together"
but I'm hurting inside,i'm such a pretender
all my smiles are fake,i'm a just a big liar
I've been hiding this feelings for quite some time
I try to suppress my yearning for you to be mine
I know you treat me just like a li'l sister
and that's the only reason why I'm always bitter
how i wish you'd love me, but who am i kidding?
You will never see that you are what I am needing
i will never experience a real happy ending
my heart is bleeding and i am slowly dying

Author's Note

Please don't criticize too much.

Reviews

[Barbara Walker]

You tell it like it is and there is nothing wrong with that. Your emotions come through clearly with your concrete diction. Some people may not like the informal diction and use of idiomatic expression, but sometimes this can add to the poem. (Use of aint.) The structure is okay or you could break it up into several stanzas.) Your syntax is good and the subject is a universal one, gauranteeing reader understanding. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this piece.

[Fate Serenity]

thank you :)
i appreciated your review .

[Chiradeep Patra]

Why anybody will criticize you for writing a beautiful poem?

By the way, is it your personal experience? Its really painful to see your loved one with somebody else who is also close to you. Life experiences make us strong for better future and for making better decisions in life.

God bless!

[Fate Serenity]

yeah, it is my personal experience and thank you for the comment :)