Sensation Without Cessation

Sensation Without Cessation

The tunes pour loudly into my thirsty dry ears.
My tried soul and scarred body sway to the beat.
Forever wandering spirit and mind follow the rhythm.
Songs with words echo through all that is me.
My imagination floats free at chants without words.

In the silence spaces, I hear music when there is none.
Notes, I see that vibrate where others see darkness.
Words, notes, sounds, sights all make the melody.
I dance, run, sing, stand still, cry and laugh all at once.
My hands try to write that which flows relentlessly through me.
Sadly, that very paltry human act pollutes the purity of it all.
I cannot capture or express what it all means as it flows past.

Must one destroy self to release the dirge that lies beneath?
Should I expand to vapor to express the siren strains I see?
Must I join without reserve the slow waltz of the stars?
Can I meld with the strings of reality as they proclaim their psalms?
Do you hear the operatic vocals of the golden tongues of time?

Reviews

[Nessly]

"Must one destroy self to release the dirge that lies beneath?
Should I expand to vapor to express the siren strains I see?
Must I join without reserve the slow waltz of the stars?
Can I meld with the strings of reality as they proclaim their psalms?
Do you hear the operatic vocals of the golden tongues of time?"

This last stanza is amazing... Some days it does feel as though destroying the self is our only option. You delivered a beautiful message here. It reminds me of those depressing days where I force myself to sway to the beats of my favorite songs.

On the second stanza - line 2, should "were" be "where"? I think that's the only possible "mistake" I see. It flows nicely and your imagery is amazing. Great work!

[H.L. Cerveise]

I am so glad you enjoyed it. To be honest I was swaying to music, songs from Kamelot and Nightwish to name a few. Oh, my you are so right it was the wrong word. It has been corrected. Many thanks for seeing that and letting me know.

[Nessly]

Oh... my... gosh!!! You're a Kamelot and Nightwish fan?.. Like both of them?.. I LOVE them! Both power metal and symphonic metal reach deep within me, speaking to me. They definitely inspire! You're welcome, we all make typos. :)

[Nessly]

I apologize. There's not many fans of those bands here, especially both of them.

[H.L. Cerveise]

I have their songs among other bands I like on my Tesla Coil Radio station. I also have a celtic/etc Internet radio station named Celtic North. You can find both in my blog and profile here. They are free. Sometimes I play My Train of Thoughts so many times if it was a record it would be worn out. A lot of my poetry comes from music.

[Nessly]

I believe music to be a great muse! Nightwhish's lyrics are basically poetry put to music. :)

[H.L. Cerveise]

Oh I so agree. It is like a bio-feedback. ( = Poetry and Poetry = Music) It has been that way for centuries. Sappho's poems were made to be song, from what we know from the limited knowledge we have of her. I will send you a read request of my poem, "Ode to Sappho."

[Nessly]

Oh, I look forward to reading it! Thanks!

[H.L. Cerveise]

oops missed some of my equation, lol (Music = Poetry and Poetry = Music)

[Nessly]

That's okay. I inferred what you meant. :)

[Zaliodir]

I loved it so much. I myself hear music where there is none, feel a beat that no one plays. The last stanza was my favorite. It feels like a soul crying out in anguish. The best line in the whole piece is "Do you hear the operatic vocals of the golden tongues of time?" Wow, what a powerful way to end!

[H.L. Cerveise]

This one I felt like I was hearing that line. It was so moving as my mind felt and heard the voices.

[manisha]

The first line was amazing it make me to read whole poem and last stanza as nessly said someday it does feel.... destroying the self is only option. Nice work :)

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem. I am glad you liked it.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

Your poems always have a smooth flow. It seems as if somebody is just talking to you like all do. However, the way you talk with your poems is exceptional- outstanding. Great lines, great poet. Keep writing.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading my poem. What you said about, "as if somebody is just talking to you," is for sure my goal.

[iamshadowine]

"In the silence spaces, I hear music when there is none.
Notes, I see that vibrate were others see darkness.
Words, notes, sounds, sights all make the melody."
excellent lines, amazing poem! loved it!
keep writing :)

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my writing. I am glad you liked it.

[=]

I find it insanely hard to review poetry in a constructive way. I've never been much of a critique. I suppose all I can really say is that I did genuinely enjoy this poem. It felt highly original. Good work.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for your review. Believe me I find it hard myself. Sometimes I just say I like or love it and other times certain lines hit me hard and I will say so. I often over look grammar issues unless I feel correct word structure would help the poem. I like you comments because I like a reader to see it as different (original) and that they enjoy it in some way.

[Destiny Izaguirre Corte..]

Well written, It felt like I was reading a piece fron a novel or a story.

My hands try to write that which flows relentlessly through me.
Sadly, that very paltry human act pollutes the purity of it all.

These two lines captured my attention.
I really like the way you put the words together. The way you these lines flow with one another in such a fascinating and imaginative way.

This piece it just .. You have talent and a great creative mind. I honestly admire your flow with words. Well written!!

One thing - We all make mistakes. I hope you don't mind - On the second line you wrote, "tried"
You spell, "tired" wrong. Honestly I make that mistake all the time!! I really hope you don't mind.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you so much for your kind words. No I do not mind you pointing things out (in fact, I love discourse) ; however, in this case I did mean "tried" as in:

Tried - definition of tried by The Free Dictionary
www.thefreedictionary.com/tried
Thoroughly tested and proved to be good or trustworthy. 2. Made to undergo trials or distress.

Number 2 specially.

[H.L. Cerveise]

What I mean by that line is in the trials and distress that have occurred to me has tormented my soul and scarred the body.

[Destiny Izaguirre Cortez]

Oh! I apologize! Thank you for clarifying that for me, I really appreciate it. Now I get it :)

[H.L. Cerveise]

I do make mistakes so no need to apologize. I bid you good night my fellow warrior poet.