Feelings

A Poem by Harrisen Viator

Oh I got this feeling

a feeling that won't do.

How strange and empty

my heart is so blue.

These feelings come and they go,

but never for too long.

Oh why do I deserve this?

Oh what did I do wrong?

My mind, my greatest enemy

I just need it to be my friend,

but it keeps tearing me down

I wish it all would end.

Can it not feel the suffering,

or hear my pleas?

I'm struggling to stay afloat

in these rough seas.

© 2013 Harrisen Viator

Author's Note

What do you think about the rhyme scheme? Do you think it has good flow?

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TLK

As a sufferer of depression myself, and also a psychologist, I ache for more complexity in poems about the subject. However, attempting the mindset of someone who is perhaps more glib about the issue, I think this would teach me some sympathy for sufferers.

Posted 11 Years Ago

11 Years Ago

Thank you for the review, I'm glad that it can help you sympathize more and hopefully it will help y.. read more

Jupiter

I just adore this. The simplicity in your work speaks volumes considering it moves me so much. It was a short read but in the end I found myself being moved by the topic. I have been there before and I know how it is to be your own worst enemy. This made me feel sadness but just a little bit of hope too.