Shipwrecked

Ever wondered,

What it would be like

To be shipwrecked?

I have

I've imagined it to be

On a deserted island

In the Bermuda Triangle

Being there wondering 

Will anybody ever find me?

I've imagined it to be

As scary as being in a 

Dark house alone at night

While the small island

Howls at me

Ever wondered,

what it would be like 

To be shipwrecked?

Reviews

[LunarSong]

How have I not reviewed this?? My computer messed up and went to this... But it's nice, even if it is four years old. Well, if you ever have any plans of editing this, the end flows a little better than the beginning, so I would try to imitate more of the style at the end.

[Starscraper]

You got me! I think something should be pointed out in my defense. I was forced to write this when I was a freshman. So that could be part of the flow problem. I didn't really care. Maybe I'll fool around with it now though.

[LunarSong]

Haha. That is a good defense. Yeah, I mostly just felt like I needed to review it since I hadn't. But.. I think I had read it. I really don't know.

[Starscraper]

Well, it doesn't matter anymore.

[LunarSong]

Probably not. ;)

[Wolfwind Words]

I read this and I immediately thought to myself... "Is his name Wilson?"

I like the concept this poem provokes. Most people focus on the before and the conclusion of an event. This poem focuses us on the reality. That reality gets us to ponder what our emotion might be in such a case... what would we feel? Fear... Regret... Hope... Desperation... Hunger? Then we dive deeper into that great knowing of how being Alone might truly be like.

Great poem!

[ReadsAtDances]

Very interesting and unique poem! I especially like the bit about how it would be like "a dark house alone at night." Thanks for the cool poem.

[Philip Muls]

You can feel the alone-ness, the wondering.

Well done.

[Salenora]

Different but makes you wonder. What if?

[Megara]

good question

[Dearantlers]

I liked it a lot! My favorite part is where you said,
"While the small island
Howls at me."
I think it's awesome that you said the island howls. Great job!

[Calibaster]

that felt kinda.... off. It felt like you were starting and stopping a lot, but it was o.k. you could elaborate, and really get a good beat going!