Quiet Contemplation

Something light

Quiet contemplation
At the apex of the morn
Quiet immolation
Precedes the sun reborn

Ghostly mist swept away
To places up on high
As the sword of each new ray
Deftly slices through the sky

A cacophony of sound
Builds to a crescendo
And often I have found
It's time to close the window

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Early morning pondering before the world crashes in. I've always enjoyed that. Wonderful poem Anne!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks Red. I appreciate it.

[Eddie Phillips]

Powerful word choice, and wonderful vision of the breaking day. I enjoyed the word play in this poem. You did a wonderful job.

[icelandicblue]

You are always so kind. Thank you.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Your poem has put a smile on my face this morning and I thank you. Have a sunshiney day!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Joyce.

[TL Boehm]

I like this. It reminds me of summer mornings in my neighborhood.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks TL- there are those moments of beauty we just feel compelled to capture if we can.

[Mrs.Murs]

this is very nicely written
Liked the pick u painted ere

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much for reading and commenting.

[Rita L. Sev]

This is wonderful! I was being lulled by the gentle flow, then the outside noise hit! Thanks for the smile!

[icelandicblue]

Thanks so much Rita!

[Distantview123]

Some nicely composed images, and the last line made me smile. A good write. ~ Robert.

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much Robert. ; )

[Samuel Pennell]

"Quiet immolation
Precedes the sun reborn"

Great couple of lines here. I also love the last stanza. The birds arising. Am I right? I love that they finally erupt in a symphony it brings the poem to a great finish. Beautiful work! Great rhyme with "crescendo" and "window."

[icelandicblue]

Yes. it's the birds. My first draft had me grabbing a gun lol. Thanks for reading Samuel.

[Samuel Pennell]

There ya go-

"I grabbed my shotgun and blasted those b******s to Kingdom Come. Feathers flew everywhere. Smoke rose from my cigar, I looked out through my mirror sunglasses, and a slow smile creased my lips."

Haha lol. That would be a great ending! :)

[icelandicblue]

LOL- At 4 AM I know exactly what you mean.

[Marie]

A lovely way of looking at the sunrise...and hearing the morning...

[icelandicblue]

Thank you so much Marie.

[s y e]

This is different to your other writes at the moment, that's good. You know, no matter what, in some way or another there will always be a little bit of light at the end of the tunnel, Blue - this is a lovely write.

"As the sword of each new ray
Deftly slices through the sky"

-- I love the imagery in this one, lovely. And as for the wording, amazing as always.

[icelandicblue]

Thanks sweetie, glad you liked it.