The Underworld Beckons

The Underworld Beckons

A Poem by ilurvekinilaw
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Can I get this obvious as to who the narrator is? Lol. My college paper said it was too... prosaic.

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You never had to love me, my dear,

You who I bound in chains in the midst of spring and sunshine,

You whose mouth my hand clamped over

As my steeds plunged deeper

And the earth caved in.

You never had to love me

Even as I offered you cold gold and rubies

In exchange for a little warmth,

Even as I draped my mantle over you

And made you my queen and my wife.

You never had to love me

Despite letting you go back

Into the light and waiting half a year

For every year of my existence

Just to claim you as mine.

You never had to love me

But I want to know if you did.

© 2008 ilurvekinilaw


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Go ahead. Let it rip.

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I think this is pretty good, although Aesthetics of Verbal Ammo is probably still my favorite :D
Your professor sounds kind of like a d****e, for this is not too prosaic (I guess it is a wee bit, as in it resembles prose, but eh... I can't put what I'm trying to explain into words right now, lol).

"You who I bound in chains in the midst of spring and sunshine,
You whose mouth my hand clamped over
As my steeds plunged deeper
And the earth caved in."

^ The description and imagery is awesome. Your prof. should have given this more recognition than your prof. seems to have.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I think this is pretty good, although Aesthetics of Verbal Ammo is probably still my favorite :D
Your professor sounds kind of like a d****e, for this is not too prosaic (I guess it is a wee bit, as in it resembles prose, but eh... I can't put what I'm trying to explain into words right now, lol).

"You who I bound in chains in the midst of spring and sunshine,
You whose mouth my hand clamped over
As my steeds plunged deeper
And the earth caved in."

^ The description and imagery is awesome. Your prof. should have given this more recognition than your prof. seems to have.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I liked the repetition of that one line, "You never had to love me." It was interesting, your character's voice and the way things were described. I liked the imagery as well as the last line of wanting to know, even if the truth would be undesirable.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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