I enjoyed reading this with just the light and dark in my head as opposed to actual colors, but then it makes me wonder if the poem would be stronger WITH color imagery. I would only change the last line to: and forever they will, throughout the night. It just reads better for me. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed! :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
I don't know, that would take away the meanig, I think. Itnerestimg question! I'll think about your .. read moreI don't know, that would take away the meanig, I think. Itnerestimg question! I'll think about your suggestion. Thank you for reading and for the suggestion, much appreciated :)
rulers aren't protected by the their power and wealth...we are all vulnerable...
and one day that light is going to go out...
and we will lie in darkness.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thank you for the insightful review, Jacob, always a pleasure to delve into the mind of the reader. .. read moreThank you for the insightful review, Jacob, always a pleasure to delve into the mind of the reader. Thanks for reading! =)
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