What If
A Poem by
Devesh
What if I should wake before I fall asleep? Would I see the light? Or fall a little too deep? Fade into the sky? Or swim across the sea? Just let everything go? To be, just be. I see your star shine amidst all the screams your light lights my sky, a blanket of dreams. Makes me think and wonder Am I mine to keep? Why is it that I am afraid to fall asleep?
© 2014 Devesh
Featured Review
I like the thoughts and questions in the poem. Sometime sleep lead us to the dark or the light. I did like the closing lines. To fear sleep and dreams would be a bad place to be. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you for reading :))
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This poem is written very well. Most people question many things like this right before they go to sleep. Overall I think it is very good much like your other writing!!! Good job
Posted 10 Years Ago
This poem is written very well. Most people question many things like this right before they go to sleep. Overall I think it is very good much like your other writing!!! Good job
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you for reading, Jennifer! :)
This really gets the mind going. You wrote this beautifully. I love the flow and the thought process put behind those words. Great job! :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
This really gets the mind going. You wrote this beautifully. I love the flow and the thought process put behind those words. Great job! :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you, Madalyn :)
This is very thought provoking Devish :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
This is very thought provoking Devish :)
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you for reading, Vidya :)
10 Years Ago
You are welcome :)
Good philosophical poem, I like the introspection here Devesh. You had me hooked in the first two lines, brilliant write my friend.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Good philosophical poem, I like the introspection here Devesh. You had me hooked in the first two lines, brilliant write my friend.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thanks a lot, Frieda :)
Dude Devesh, you are such a great writer! Another great write and read! Well done bro!
Posted 10 Years Ago
Dude Devesh, you are such a great writer! Another great write and read! Well done bro!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thanks a lot, Erik! :)
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