Two Boys

may 2009, at the Riverside Theater

two boys fell in love in the mosh pit

while geologist spun his head round

giving me whiplash from the sway

and his little boxes went

thump

thumpata

thump

 

a redhead with a shaggy goatee, a brunette with short cropped hair

we stood close and the redhead and i

screamed together over thunderclaps and guitar loops

 

swarm of bodies and we moved in waves

as avey crooned about fireworks

limbs sweaty and strong

no time for nice, get off my f****n shoe!

 

and to my left i saw chaos

people flying back and forth

red got pulled south

and black held onto the stage bewildered

 

a break in the noise

i saw black pull red towards him

back to his side, back in his presence

into his arms, and

without hesitation

pulled him into a kiss

 

jaws dropped and

no one around us

was watching the three fluorescent

men onstage anymore

 

red pulled away from

black, startled,

frightened and

hopelessly

hypnotized

 

the two began to speak simultaneously

"Mark, I-"

"What the-"

 

neither of them finished,

there was no point in rationalizing

(and no need to f*****g explain)

 

red kissed black voraciously

black curled his fingers in red's hair

grabbing locks and the two of them

clung to each other

 

while panda bear wailed and

and orb flashed worlds i'll never see

two boys held onto each other

as the pit flowed and ebbed

 

i had my palms on the the edge of the stage

feeling sick with ache

i looked around for red and black

hoping they'd find the air pocket

next to me

 

under vibrating fuzz

i saw red spooning black

speechless and peaceful

admist the maelstrom of bodies

lights flashing pink and turquoise

all of us are now

one body of

 

twisted hair and

sweaty throats

when the stage lights turned back on

no one wanted to leave

 

except red and black, of course

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Alessander]

This seems like a lot of editing, but I think if you would've ended it "and they clung to each other" it would've been a lot more powerful - you can even it on

they clung to each other
in the midst of a maelestrom of bodies
like (and insert a simile here).

Don't know, just a thought. But I really liked the way you described the setting - maybe it's because I've been to a lot of rock concerts, which are def testosterone filled, so I can imagine the shock of this scene - it prob woudn't be as suprising in a Madonna concert lol I also like the symbolic "Red and Black" (r u making an allusion to the book?) Nice refreshing work.