Rain is gonna fall

I'm amazed that

truth is there

for those who stare

and

did you know that

you can sell your

soul for gold

and

once that gold

has bought your

soul,

you look and see

you're nothing

but the dead man.

Without no needs

with heavy thoughts

bended colors

fading anyway..

Nothing to say,

too much to speak,

lend me your eyes,

I'm dead before

the end.

Reviews

[Ezekiel Silver]

An excellent piece with intriguing word structure and a thought-provoking theme. I like it!

[isus]

glad you like it :)

[melissa]

Awesome poem keep up the great work i can't wait to read more

[isus]

hehhe thanx :)

[melissa]

Your welcome

[stars are far]

"I'm dead before the end" ... wow.. that was really amazing writing..
i liked it.. you did a good job :)

[isus]

thanx :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wonderful poem, isus.. the last stanza is a killer.. gets me right in the gut.. great job with this one

[isus]

thanx Lori :)

[Tinkerbellje]

Nice writing. Well done!

[isus]

thanx thanx

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

A dead man is of no value to our world, but his life before it may be....
Nice write!

[isus]

thanx for reading Josie

[MsJewel]

Great flow to this well written poem. Very nice!

:) Julie

[isus]

thanx Julie :)

[L4rn13]

I like the short stanzas like you follow the realisation the character has as they dim away. Very nice.

[isus]

glad you like it :)

[Mercutio]

I enjoyed it. Good work mate ,keep on writing.

[isus]

thanx, i will

[Ina]

Great work. You did an amazing job.

[isus]

wow, thanx Ina