smile

smile

A Poem by itsjustme
"

still new at hiaku. after the spring break im in a happy mood so i decided to describe and philosify on smiling.

"

when a person smiles

it shines, bending for light.

adapting to life.

© 2010 itsjustme


Author's Note

itsjustme
kinda wish bright and light wouldn't rhyme in this... well what do you think? i like the concept. do you? i wuv revewers lol.

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gj

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is good. Maybe change, 'it is bright' to 'it shines' or something similar to avoid the rhyme.

Posted 14 Years Ago


its short... but concise... :)

Posted 14 Years Ago



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my life as a poet started when i was a freshman in high school. there was this girl that i was going out with and i decided hey, girls like poetry ill write some. at first i rote only about her and .. more..

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