Just F*****g Don't

Just F*****g Don't

A Poem by silver threaded queen

Please don't look at me
with that superior look 
upon your face
the same face that I have the strong urge
to place a pillow over
just f*****g don't
don't lecture me
with that monotone voice
the same voice
that makes me want to
slam my fist into your throat
just f*****g don't
don't grab me
with that hand
that makes me feel
like a bad six year old
Just
F*****g 
Don't

© 2012 silver threaded queen


Author's Note

silver threaded queen
Okay, this is not for anyone's benefit, if you like it, fine. Thank you for the review. But if you don't, there is no need to place a review, just stating that you don't like it. Thank you.

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Hmm, this piece has an interesting concept, but I feel like some of the lines don't work. "Upon your face/The same face that I have the strong urge/To place a pillow over." You kind of lost me with "to place a pillow over." That line just threw off the emotion and made it sound more comedic. Now, for the rest of the poem, I just believe some of the phrases could've been worded differently to make it flow smoother. This was a good poem and I hope to see more entries.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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I think it's great! Not necessarily as a piece of literary genius, But I love the reaction it has created amongst the reviewers! I like that! Don't stop doing it...'Just f*****g don't!' OK?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

silver threaded queen

11 Years Ago

Lol... thank you and alot of the reviews were correct... it was more of a dry sarcasm filled poem .. read more
CRAIG A. THOMSON

11 Years Ago

Chack out 'Search for the sunlight' by me, C. A Thomson.
It's only a first draft, but you migh.. read more
Hmm, this piece has an interesting concept, but I feel like some of the lines don't work. "Upon your face/The same face that I have the strong urge/To place a pillow over." You kind of lost me with "to place a pillow over." That line just threw off the emotion and made it sound more comedic. Now, for the rest of the poem, I just believe some of the phrases could've been worded differently to make it flow smoother. This was a good poem and I hope to see more entries.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hm--

I will have to re-read this to fully understand it. (but, it's not because of the way it is written, it's because my brain cannot fully understand this.)
But, it seems to be good. :)

~S. D. Blankenship

Posted 12 Years Ago


wow it sums up alot! That how i feel toward people at our school great job


Posted 12 Years Ago


Lots of raw emotions, it makes this poem great! Nice job! Also, I love the title.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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