What Happened

What Happened

A Poem by silver threaded queen

I always tried to be what you wanted
but I could never quite make it
i tried to be you idealistic human
but in the end I always had to fake it
in the end we always ended up fading
the love
the hope 
the friendship 
all gone
nothing left but a empty shell
a empty home
a empty heart
so, whatever happened
to 'ever and always'?

© 2012 silver threaded queen


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great

Posted 6 Years Ago


very somber, makes me imagine childhood best friends growing different and not being able to adapt to each other with age. its actually really relatable.

Posted 7 Years Ago


"But I could never quite make it/I tried to be you idealistic human" That makes it sound like this narrator isn't a human. How about lover instead? I mean, this sounds like a love poem or something of sentiment. Is it not? Grammar bugged me on five different levels, but it's poetry; grammar has no place in poetry says e.e. cummings.

Getting past all of the critique, I think this poem is okay in all honesty. I don't think it's bad but it could be better.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Bitter and sweet, combined to lament! I felt this! xoxo

Posted 7 Years Ago


A good poem, very sad, but the way you look at difficult situations will help you a lot in the future, keep writing good work like this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


A profound piece of writing......Well penned......Whisk

Posted 7 Years Ago



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