Which castles trace

Love is always a fairytale

 

Which castles trace

by jack

 

Castles stand, O’ precious flow of filtered dreams and star shine glow

Upon a hill, in distant flight, beckoning this winter’s night

O’ winding road with pebbles cast and gardens rich of every past

Lay wishes made, on ripples clear of crystalline and words to hear

 

Tree top winds to serenade before the branches bent and swayed

O’er forest deep and climbing fears when rain drops fall of mounting tears

O’ breathe of this and many so, to stand of breeze fed gentle flow

With scent of jasmine on the air and rose bud petals in your hair

 

Lay colors rich and vibrant sweet, a soft caress upon your feet

In silken sheen and opal blend, o’er shaded mist around the bend

For this I bring to only you, my angel sweet and love so true

O’ every dream your heart desires and passions deep of dancing fires

 

My love, beneath this painted sky, with sparrow’s nest and captured eye

Cascades a truth of rapids pure, for this my one that I adore

So climb, I pray, upon my steed, of quickened pace and steady speed

As I will lead you to this place, of perfect love which castles trace

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[DIVYA]

You saved the best for the last Jack :)

This poem paints another picture of the magical realms of love with vividity and flourish. A rich, sweet and scented promise of love is what I take away from this graceful poetry. Thanks for sharing!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Divya

[Cara]

amazing write ^_^ loved it

[Jack...]

Thank you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

amazing how you have the talent to write this "old time" poetry...these ballads with such rhythm, rhyme and focus...

a flowy poem...quite pleasant to read.

jacob

[Jack...]

Thank you sir

[keyvan]

beautiful...

[Jack...]

Thanks Keyvan

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a beautifully painted piece of love and I can see myself walking among this fairytale that dreams are made of.

[Jack...]

I am happy you enjoyed it, thank you so much.

[icelandicblue]

A bard you are indeed.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much.

[Marie]

A beautiful poem...Your wording and phrasing are quite wonderful...the third verse is my favorite...

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Marie

[Kaylee]

This is absolutely beautiful - very charming indeed, thank you very much for sharing. :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much for reading my poem.

P.S. I like your moustache

[Kaylee]

Thank you for sharing! And why thank you, I've been growing it out for weeks now!

[Frieda P]

I have no adjectives suitable to describe this one Jack, just simply took my breath away, sincerely mean that...it's so romantic and it sways in a lovely breeze as I read it. This would surely make any woman swoon....i know it had that affect on me.

'With scent of jasmine on the air and rose bud petals in your hair'

Every line is sheer perfection, I just happen to love that one best!

[Jack...]

Thanks Frieda, I am thrilled that you enjoyed this poem. Thank you for your flattering words, they mean so much to me.

[quinfinn]

whew, this is intensely gorgeous. you do a live reading of this one and you'll get laid for sure! all kidding aside though, this is beautifully worded and masterfully penned, dear jack. outstanding piece of prose!

[Jack...]

I will definitely start practicing reading this aloud right now... :)>
Thanks so much, I appreciate it.

[quinfinn]

awesome write, my friend