Broken Man

Once the heart breaks, so does the man

 

Broken man

 

Shredded letters on the floor

Empty whiskey bottles

Eviction notice on the door

Cruising at full throttle

 

Not a penny to his name

Longing the impending

No one but himself to blame

Misery unending

 

This is but a broken man

Pieces crushed and shattered

Love hath left him once again

Upon the wind now scattered

 

Vices form his prison walls

Slowly closing in

Death to be his last reward

He begs it to begin

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Angi]

This reads like the beginning of the end. Such devastation and hopelessness pour through the spaces between these words. I am hoping he gets up and opens that damn door!

[Jack...]

He's gotta find a new key first. Thanks so much Angi.

[Marie]

A short, tragic story...it sounds like a suicide...

[Jack...]

It might come to that Marie, you never know.

[KAOlmsted]

Pretty stark picture you've painted there...unfortunately it goes that way sometimes. Great work here, Jack...

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Kimmer.

[KAOlmsted]

Always my pleasure.

[Holly Mason]

well I am hoping for an attractive female warden to keep a close eye on your cell...
life does have a vice grip on our souls when it comes to love
love the imagery-
shredded, eviction notice, crushed, shattered...this poor soul has nothing left
thank you for sharing fine sir

[Jack...]

Thanks Holly, with friends like you, broken can always be fixed

[MOON]

Poignant , thought provoking write great flow and word choice.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Moon.

[Sami Khalil]

"This is but a broken man

Pieces crushed and shattered

Love hath left him once again

Upon the wind now scattered"
You have painted his picture marvelously in a great poem...:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my good friend. I am happy you enjoyed it.

[Sami Khalil]

I did...My pleasure...:)

[Keith]

Edgy poem with powerful images. You have accurately described someone I know, and no one can help our broken man until he wants to be helped.

[Jack...]

Thanks Keith. I too have known this feeling a few times in my life. Hope your friend pulls out of it.

[Vikrantsingh]

Nice and powerful.. Loved the title :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much sir.

[Vikrantsingh]

Please don't address me "Sir" - Jack I'm way younger and less mature :)
Let me address you with this "Jack Sir"

- Cheers!!
Vikrantsingh Parmar.

[Jack...]

Thanks my young friend.

[Vikrantsingh]

Welcome Sir - Always :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Very powerful and deeply felt... :)

[Jack...]

Thanks Debbie. Nice to see you again.

[Angel]

Some wise guy once said "Don't take life so seriously. You'll never get out of it alive"...

I want to cuddle this guy in my arms and give him some cold milk and warm chocolate chip cookies.
That was my Gramma's answer to a broken heart...
And, while it didn't make the problem go away, it did make it feel better, at least for a little while.

Beats the hell out of whiskey bottles, etc...

Great write, Jack.
You made this old lady, veteran of many a broken heart, weep.

[Jack...]

Angel my friend, thank you so much for your wonderful review of my poem.