Whispering goodbye

Why?

 

Whispering goodbye

 

 

On the waves of a dream,

I lay waiting on shore,

a cold beach this night

beneath a burdened moon

crying stardust

 

I sink slowly

into the wet sand…

pleading with the waters

for answers to shamed questions,

while counting the shades of violet

framing a weeping sky

 

Thoughts flow like the tides

on an endless journey,

weaving contours and

bends deep within

this sorrow that washes

over me

 

I watch as these waves slip away,

carrying hopes still lingering

and exposing the loss

I feel, fiercely

crashing before my eyes,

in opaque foam

 

I can not move,

my body is still,

my breath salted and tethered,

as I reach

for shadows of my memories,

only to find them…

 

whispering goodbye

on the breeze

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Lily Finch]

aww very sad poem.. but beautiful too :) and one more thing is that image is yours painting? it's fabulous

[Jack...]

Thank you Maryam. No it is not mine, wish it was, but not this time.

[Lily Finch]

:D ... well it's okay and you are welcome sir !!!! :)

[rhythm&blues]

Such sadness on this page, your poems always have such an effect.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend.

[Acucena G.]

Wow, its a wonderful art, the flow is breath taking. Well done Jack

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words.

[Acucena G.]

You are welcome my friend.

[redflutterby]

I can't stop crying this morning for our sweet friend. Her loss is awful...beyond words. But you express it so poignantly Jack. As someone with an interest in the cause of women and children subjected to violence let me thank you for channeling this. More men need to stand up for the innocent and weak. Speak to share this grief and tragedy. Thank you Jack...with all my heart!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend. I wish I knew the perfect words to say to relieve this sorrow from her heart, I'm just not sure that I can.

[redflutterby]

Honestly jack none of us can. Just be there for her as she tries to deal with this. Its all we have to give....x

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wow Jack... that is some loss! a deep, passionate-filled loss. I love all of the water images.. so beautiful and they drew me right into this poem. I think my favorite stanza is the first.. I could picture it all so well and your words were lovely. This goes into my favorites' file =)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Lori. A friend of mine is in pain this morning and I am feeling that pain and channeling it through this poem. I appreciate your kind words.

[Ravyne Hawke]

you are a wonderful friend, Jack =)

[Sami Khalil]

"Thoughts flow like the tides
on an endless journey,
weaving contours and
bends deep within
this sorrow that washes
over me

I watch as these waves slip away,
carrying hopes still lingering"
Lovely, touching deeply, mesmerizing images...Style with quality...:)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Sami. Always kind words from you dear friend thrill me and remind me that sometimes I am something. I appreciate you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are . I'm like you we sometimes sell ourselves short...Pen on friend...:)

[s y e]

Oh wow, Jack! The way write your poetry with such passion and honesty, the way you put your heart and soul into your writes. You come up with some amazing images and writes.

"I sink slowly
into the wet sand…
pleading with the waters
for answers to shamed questions,
while counting the shades of violet
framing a weeping sky"

I loved it, the imagery was vivid and it was really touching. Saying goodbye is the hardest thing to do, especially to a loved one or someone you hold close to your heart. I remember saying goodbye to my friends over in the Middle East was hard, we had known each other since we were 5 and went to school together for 8 years. I loved this, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my sweet friend. there is much sorrow in my heart this morning and I had to release it somehow. Your kind words have brought a smile to my face today. Thank you so much again.

[s y e]

Awwww, Jack :-( Feel better soon! And smile, its contagious :D

[carol burgess romance]

your words flow so easily to create another wonderful art form

[Jack...]

Thank you Carol. I wrote this early this morning upon finding out a friend has experienced a loss.