South Texas Senryu

Beware...it's hot!!

 

 

Heavy breathing, sighs

Moaning shared with glistened sweat

Damn it’s hot outside

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Hahahaha, you're such a tease my friend!

[Jack...]

I guess the heat got to me.

[Frieda P]

Another one blaming it on the heat index, sure, sure. :-)

[Jack...]

Is it getting hotter in here or is it just me?

[Brianna Brie]

LOL...for a minute there I thought it was X-rated! Great scorcher of a Senryu.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Brianna. :)

[ShelleyA]

Hi Jack. A very good write about the scorching heat and humidity. Excellent use of brevity. A skillfully crafted Senryu. Imagery is good as are the descriptives. Good flow and tone. Good depth of feeling; we had a heat wave for 8 days that ended a week or so ago. I can relate. Good word choice. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Well penned and a most enjoyable read. Write on!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Shelley, we have been over 100 for 2 weeks now and it doesn't look to be ending anytime soon.

[ShelleyA]

I feel for you Jack. It was miserable and uncomfortable here during our heatwave. I hope the heat in South Texas will break soon. Have a good night.

[Relic]

hahahaha, good one jack. I like it.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[ANTO]

I got warm just reading this Jack. I can hear Jimmy Stewart saying this in Flight of the Phoenix
Great lines Jack

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. Just trying to stay cool.

[ANTO]

You are cool ! Metaphorically speaking ... ;P

[Jack...]

Thanks my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

I lived in Houston Jack for 8 years and tell me about it , it is hot over that . Feels like the Sahara desert in the summer time...A splendid one and short...:)

[Jack...]

Thanks Sami...105 today.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow...Beware of heatstrokes...You are welcome...:)