Brightly Unaffected

 

 

Brightly Unaffected

 

What of this sun that warms my back

Tempting me to turn around

Pleading for my attention

Over an anxious landscape of questions

Geometric outcroppings of thought

And life goes on beyond its light

 

Blue sky swan dives fall eternal

On the brink of feelings conjured

Draping over azure dreams

Becoming slower minutes crawling

Down wretched pathways

Leading to all voided expectations

 

Yet time will come and go

As high above me lay sheltered wishes

Which I harness in tethered ideas

Collecting on shoulders of heated display

Brushing off doubts uninspired

Turning to face this sun…brightly unaffected

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

Brushing off doubts uninspired
Turning to face this sun…brightly unaffected

It is so hard to say positive sometimes. But what do you have if you don't have hope.

[Jack...]

Sunburn? Thanks so much Pryde.

[Pryde Foltz]

LOL ….. yeah, there's that.

[DIVYA]

Being in a place where the sun is especially atrocious (summer is just round the corner) I could still appreciate it's warmth spreading over the blue azure skies and go on in the face of it's heat,

"Yet time will come and go

As high above me lay sheltered wishes

Which I harness in tethered ideas

Collecting on shoulders of heated display

Brushing off doubts uninspired

Turning to face this sun…brightly unaffected"


A great poem on life and how we are looking at it amidst all the heat and light.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Divya.

[Baby Ricochet]

Ah the sun. We greet it at the dawn of day then it fries the s**t out of us in the afternoon. Good poem Jack

[Jack...]

Good outlook my friend.

[Linda alexander]

Blue sky swan dives fall eternal
On the brink of feelings conjured
Draping over azure dreams
Becoming slower minutes crawling
In the middle of everything unaffected and still bright, so there is hope beyond every negatives, enjoyed

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Linda.

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care

[Lyn Anderson]

You know I find your stuff to be, for the most part, flawless, and therefore, I rarely comment on grammar, word usage, etc. In this piece tho, I stumbled over the "lay sheltered wishes" -- to my ear it sounds a little off -- seems you might be able to replace it with something -- wandered, walked, danced, floated? I don't know, lay just seems a little bland here, just a suggestion, but maybe think on it?

[Jack...]

Thanks KL. I will take your suggestions to heart.

[Lyn Anderson]

Of course, it is only my opinion.

[s y e]

Jack you always bring the sun to my side of the world... with either your poetry or your kind words to me each day, I am sitting here completely awe-struck.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kindness always Sye. I only hope I bring the same sunshine to your world that you bring to mine.

[s y e]

You do Jack, I am pretty sure it's one in the same.

[redzone]

aaaw but Jack, even if mom says not to look at the sun, we all knew that that was where the fun was... (at least says Springsteen).. ok, here we go, I got extra sun glasses, lets look Jack... lets be "affected" until we are blinded by the light!!!! er... where are we again, I can't see a damn thing... lol. ok I should actually review huh... well, my first thought is: "blue sky swan dives fall eternal"... and the rest of this part is exceptional poetry in my view.. I mean, there is depth of insight here if you are grasping just how far you are diving from that blue sky.. When I thought about this I was thinking you could get lost in this dive... anyway, my mind goes in funny places sometimes.. All this is to say simply I did enjoy reading your poem even if I am blind and still looking at the sun (at least I think I am)... ~~redzone

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend. I think I've been blinded for some time now. I know I can't see worth a flip. It all seems so dark to me (he says as he trips over his own feet). That was dancing actually. :) I am thrilled you enjoyed this. I was just sitting at my desk yesterday and the sun was beating down on my shoulders, but I didn't turn to look because I was revved up like a deuce, another runner in the night.

[redzone]

cool another Springsteen fan.. who sings along at the concerts??!! and at the computer screen...

[Jack...]

I'm a Jersey boy...you gotta love Springsteen.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Such a beautiful sight your sun my dear Jack :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Frieda P]

You'd not fare well in Belize....I'm with Marie on this one...so sad ditty Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks Frieda, indeed Marie is a smart one.

[Marie]

How could anyone be unaffected by this beautiful sun...?

[Jack...]

I guess you have to want to see it. Thanks Marie