Fidelity

My father challenged me to write on something happy and bright, like a wedding. Let me know what you think!

The dawn-to-dark you've been anticipating

Syndicate sudor spells down your spine

Subject a suit of feather white

Commenced we both entwine

 

Its a day of merriment and tears

These tears full far from pain

Today begins the remnant of our lives

 The day you take on my name

 

Idioms not yet constructed

could transmit the joy I feel

and array appreciation

as i expel your diaphanous veil

 

Eye contact so valiant

as the clergy cycles to you

and you procure our vows of fidelity

Assurance with the words "I do".

Author's Note

Not sure exactly how I did on this one! Rather hard to judge! Reviews and constructive critisizm would be greatly appreciated!

Reviews

[She comes, when I call ..]

Sudor - sweat/perspiration
Remnant - The remainder of

Thank you for all your reviews!
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I'm a little slow on comprehending some things and some words.
you can correct me If I am wrong, this write is it talking about being egaged or getting married perhaps. I fumbled with a couple of words. PLEASE don't get me wrong here I loved the write i don't know what a couple words mean...

Syndicate sudor - The word Sudor
remnant of our lives - the word Remnanat

Enjoyable read.
100/100