A cold black sea.

Love and Loss.

A dawn arises

On a cold black sea

These sharks are coming

For you and me.

Steel surrounds us

Fate will see

A kissing embrace

In a cold black sea.

Two hearts stop beating

The angels do see,

Our lives shattered around us

Underneath a cold black sea.

Author's Note

All feedback welcome!

Reviews

[Corset]

Out in a cold dark sea drowning in love, about to be dinner for the sharks. It's dark for sure, but there is that comforting middle stanza that say if we go down, we'll go down together. That was the main appeal imho of this dark offering. well done. :)

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[Voiceless]

Our lives shattered around us
Underneath a cold black sea.

I like this whole with you until the end feel I got from this line. Even in the most destructive circumstances, that companionship always overtakes that.

[Jamie]

Thank you very much!

[Jennesis]

Wow Jamie! Great job on this one. I felt the sinking feeling of emotion in it.

[Jamie]

Thank you very much :)

[Mizo4]

nice write, i had some interesting imagery in my mind from this poem :)

[Jamie]

Thank you Marion :)

[Ally]

You did a wonderful job on this poem, it was so vivid and haunting. Great job!

[Jamie]

Thank you Ally :)

[AngelEyes15]

i like this poem you captured the struggles couples face and the fate they take

[Jamie]

Thank you! I really appreciate it :)

[Skai Rain]

You painted a great picture with this piece. Bravo, my friend!

[Jamie]

Thank you :)

[Matching Socks]

Very haunting Jamie, my interpretation is quite sad.
I see one lover, perhaps both, taking their own lives.
Good writing.

[Jamie]

thank you :)

[misha]

Such a vivid beauty. Dark and haunting. Great job!

[Jamie]

thank you :)

[misha]

You are welcome :-)

[Lizardo]

A great poem about love and probably how they are swimming in a place where only they are for themselves, there love keeps them striving.
Good poem, This is really good

[Jamie]

Thank you!