Just one more drink.

Just one more drink.

A Poem by Jamie

Just one more drink
Then I'll be fine
Sinking deeper into my own personal hell
Be it whiskey or wine.

This flood of empty glasses
Are causing me to think
Is this how it all starts?
Or am I already at the brink?

A lonely bar
Brings a lonely mind
A bottomless glass
Such a murderous find.

As I consume a dark night
A blurred vision takes over my sight
People surround me but they slowly fade to black
I lay in my own blood from my blind attack.

© 2015 Jamie


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'Such a murderous find' I thought that line was the best in the work. You deal with addiction in alcoholism well, you explain the negatives to life, the false promise, the lie and include that one word murderous... and it is and it makes men into murderers.

There was an Irish comedian years ago, I think his name was Alun, he made mockery of drinks and drink, but the truth is it is a murderous business.

Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you Frank :)



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Wow. This was a fantastic piece. I love the phrase "a murderous find". That was great!
It was very emotional & I'm sure anyone who ever had these thoughts, would find it as well.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you Ashley :)
so let's drink! thats the best companion to share ur sarrow with ;)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Jamie

9 Years Ago

So true! :)
I guess that one more got you to where you want to be. Well, at least escaping from where you don't want to be. And why? That's the real question.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Exactly :)
I enjoyed reading this, defenetally a piece that people will be able to relate to. Thanks for sharring.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
that one more drink always seems to be the answer, just not the correct answer. very well written.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thanks Kris :) And very well said!
Been down this road and so thankful it's behind me, I really liked the flow of this poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Awesome poem. It is really relatable and you did a fantastic job describing the feelings of the addiction. Great rhyme scheme as well. Awesome :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you Amanda :) I appreciate it :)
'Such a murderous find' I thought that line was the best in the work. You deal with addiction in alcoholism well, you explain the negatives to life, the false promise, the lie and include that one word murderous... and it is and it makes men into murderers.

There was an Irish comedian years ago, I think his name was Alun, he made mockery of drinks and drink, but the truth is it is a murderous business.

Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you Frank :)
I love how you say as 'I consume a dark night" it's interesting how it really feels like that when you're drinking. Enjoyed this

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
You never fail to impress me. The darkness of this is intriguing. Well done, as always.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamie

9 Years Ago

You are too kind gabrielle :) Thank you!

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