have you ever?

Have you ever lost a friend?

To a guy that doesn’t care,

Have you ever thought of suicide?

Because life just isn’t fair

Have you ever kissed a guy?

Your best friend has dated,

Have you ever been judged?

Despised or even hated

Have you ever been pushed down?

For a mistake that you have made,

Have you ever been heart broken?

By a guy that went away

Have you ever made a choice?

That could lead to life or death,

Have you ever been ashamed?

Of the lines you've keep unread

Have you ever made a choice?

Or just been pushed away,

Have you ever cried just because?

Or been told you couldn’t stay,

Have you ever lost your dignity?

Or backstabbed your best friend,

Have you ever talked to God?

Because he's your only friend,

Have you ever cried for someone?

You hardly even knew,

Have you ever been mistreated

For simply being you 

 

Author's Note

ive had a rough couple of weeks...this is what i came up with while all the thoughts are in my head...hope you like it.

Reviews

[Michael V]

My dear, that is absolutly beautiful!
You are my Favorite writer, you know that right.....I Love who God made you and I thank him for every thing he has put you through...You see, everything has a purpose, we may not see it, but our purpose is not ourselves, its everybody else. He let you go through those things so you can write how you do...and without those things you wouldnt have the absolute and undeniable talent you have...so thank God!!

[Michael X]

Jaz, this is touching and absolutely well written with a natural flow,
the scope of thought causes the reader to look inward, and relive experiences that
relate to the meaning, the metaphorical perspective is capturing and
creates a feeling of sadness, as well as heartache, in concept and execution,
i'de say really nice job, and a pleasure to read.

[These Haunted Hallways]

Holy S***!! Unbelievably well done!!!! I felt this all thru me. And 'Yes' is the answer to all of these questions u have listed here. Life can be really painful, yes. However, we try to learn from our mistakes, and hopefully we are forgiven. And yet we hope that good things will come to us, and hopefully that there is a light at the end of this long, long, long tunnel. Very beautiful, hun :)

B.A.

[LostCauze[:P]]

Great Poem, I really like the questions that were covered and asked. Very creative...keep writing

[Morgan A Lynch]

i am sorry you have a tough couple of weeks..i think we are are having those.. grrr.. but this poem was awsome.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Well i must say you ask some fine questions, and when life gets us down thats what we do is start questioning ourselves and life... great emotional release you wrote as you explored your deep down feelings. Bravo my friend.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

First of all, the positives. I liked how it flowed and rhymed well, and how you spaced out the paragraphs. I always like poems, posed in a question, kinda like that Brandy song, "Have you ever" but yours is more deep.

However, we are reviewing your writing, and giving you honest criticism, and I feel there are some prominent editing errors. There are many mispellings , and you should put question marks at the end of the sentences. However, I know editors do that, and for me, it's not as much of an issue, because I usually overlook it for the whole "meat" of the poem, but it can be very distracting, so overall......

I think it's GREAT you wrote down what was in your head while you had a rough couple weeks. That's what writing is all about!! nice job.