broken

I welcome this dark room
with thoughts of tears
picture my heart
tortured by fear
enduring with time
forever mine to bear

gasping for air
struggling to breathe
thriving on the echoes
of each one of my screams

dying inside
is keeping me alive
deep within my chest
lies a murmur of life
comfortably cased in ice
emotionally deprived

if my heart didn't cry
there'd be no blood in my veins
fueling this vessel
storing all of my pain

time squeezes my heart
lack of emotion makes me choke
i want to throw up
but instead i revoke
swallowing my misery
of words unspoke

I'm lying to you
each and every day
with tears i cant cry
and every smile i fake

this void you left in me
needs to be cleaned
I'm hurting so bad
It's a daily routine
tormenting myself
but always unseen

I'm not weak for giving up
I'm finally strong enough to let go
freeing myself from this puzzle
of a broken heart with missing pieces

Author's Note

i haev been stuck i havent been able to write..but for some reason this was how i was feeling last night...hope you enjoy it!!

Reviews

[Dani California]

This is fantastic Jazmyne! Wow!
Such raw emotion flowing here...
i really felt this...
What it's like to "gasp for air"..
I've been here,
many a time..
and it just hurts.

The good thing is,
as life and love would have it,
time heals.
Every...time. :)

Excellent work my friend!
Great flow, content..
and talent!

[Overrated]

A great poem indeed, but it is a shame that you did not write this poem. How sad, that you STOLE this poem word for word and did not give credit to it's author.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Wow, this is such an amazing poem. So full of emotion and nicely written, this piece just flows wonderfully. Awesome work!!!

Heather

[PENS FOR PEACE /TJ CALI..]

Gret poem, I've been so broken in life that I too couldn't cry for my sadness anymore!
Great piece, I felt your pain in your soul through it all!
Keep writing, you're aritisticly good!
TIM

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I like the poem, the intensity and strength in it is what I am drawn to as a reader. You leave us curious as to what you are possibly talking about: did you cheat on him, did he cheat? what happened? always nice that a poem does that. I liked how you broke up the four stanzas in separate paragraphs. Made it easy to read.

I did feel, however, that some parts did not flow as well, and it rhymed in some parts, and not in others. i d on't know if that was your aim, if it was, good job, because sometimes poets have their own way of wriiting it, (for example, lowercase to represent a "weak cry") Poem is an art, after all, and it's hard for us to judge it. Well, thanks again jazymne. send me more requests if you want.

[emz]

Very good write, it shows true pain and emotion, i enjoyed it immensely

x

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This is your finest piece ever as you so brilliantly shows us the rollercoaster ride of emotions when we lose a love...

if my heart didn't cry
there'd be no blood in my veins
fueling this vessel
storing all of my pain

Oh I love these lines, showing that we must let the pain run it's coarse like a virus through our emotional system and when it does we are stronger then before...

Absoloutely stunning work.

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Very intense and very powwerful. A wonderful write, touching on deep emotions. I hope writing it made you feel better. Thank you for sharing.