Truth Is for the Wise

Love is a tragedy, overall a calamity

You think you found the one but you fight constantlly

Is love a blessing, or a curse of the weak

Its as normal as sunshine but we say our love is unique

Love is a bruden, a weight heart

I can't wait to get love's weight off of my chest

Love needs protection, a bullet-proff vest

In the the valley of death is the shadow of love

I wont fall for it, I'll rise above

As the saying goes The Truth Is For The Wise

Lovers Ought To Stick To Lies

Reviews

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

I love this poem. It really sticks out and it is easy to relate this poem to almost everyone. Love seems to be a very common thing these days.

"Love is a tragedy" --- This is great for the opening of your poem. It really sticks out and is different from everyone's "love is grand" philosophy.

"you fight constantlly" --- constantly.

"Its as normal" --- It's.

"bruden, a weight heart" --- Burden and is there something missing in the second part? Maybe something like " a weight on the heart" or "a weighted heart" ?

"a bullet-proff vest" --- proof.

"In the the valley of death is the shadow of love" --- I really like this sentence and think it is very strong. It really helps to justify everything else that you have said.

"I wont fall for" --- won't.

"As the saying goes The Truth Is For The Wise" --- As the saying goes, "The Truth Is For The Wise".

"Lovers Ought To Stick To Lies" --- I love this sentence and I believe it is perfect for ending this poem. You did a great job with really getting your point across and possibly even convincing a few people to see love as you do.

[Raef C. Boylan]

s**t this feels relevant
pretty lies to selves
works so much better
to keep that unique-feeling alive
and carry on liking each other
because we fall in love with ideals
and ignore the rest
until it becomes too hard to ignore
because you've been married 3 years or whatever

I like the line
"I can't wait to get love's weight off of my chest"
but the ue of "weight" in the prior line
kind of detracts from this interesting image.
Maybe consider an alternative description for one of them?

you've done a great job
with the rhyme scheme

i enjoyed that the narrative is straightforward
yet still delves into some deep problems

the change in format at the end works well
to place emphasis and keep it interesting

overall, good work
i just think it needs a bit of work to tighten up those cool images

p.s.
"Its as normal as sunshine" [It's]

"Love is a bruden, a weight heart" [burden]
[a weight heart? is there a word missing from this sentence?]

"a bullet-proff vest" [proof]

"I wont fall for it, I'll rise above" [won't]

[Candle in the wind]

I can't wait to get love's weight off of my chest......I can feel this on my bones, its so evocative.sometimes this weight can be such a constriction and choke your very being. Thank so much for sharing.

[shadadakiya]

very pretty and wise it's just that true love is so hard to find great work