The Meaning of Life

The Meaning of Life

A Poem by The Rose That Grew From Concrete

The question everyone asks, and looks to answer

There are more searching for the cure for cancer

Some people see it as an oppertunity to joke and flashy

42 is what they said in the Guid to the Galaxy

Some say love others say war and then many others

So to the Ultimate qustion what is the answer

Its as simple as  god almighty intends

Whats the meaning of life.... It Ends

© 2008 The Rose That Grew From Concrete


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The closing line, that is what this whole poem should be about. Here is my philosophical opinion, and then i will give you a more technical critique. Now, if you are going to write a piece on a philosophical topic, such as something incredibly debatable as the meaning of life, then damn well explore the topic! You were describing what people do in life, and then you go any say that the meaning of life is to die. So, maybe explore WHY people try to fill the void before they die. Are they searching for answers? Purpose (because to live to die goes against all instinct and what society feeds us). Explore the topics deeper, look at people, look at the whole. And then bring it back to the individual. What is death? is it the end? Or just a passing into another reality? Some may call it heaven/hell, the afterlife, or maybe like Richard Linklater suggested in Waking Life that you go into a lucid dream state. Basically in short, if you are going to write about such a topic, then really write about it.

As for style and flow, i think you need to develop your writing a little more. Instead of spoon feeding people, use images, feelings, senses, pictures. There are so many things people ignore when writing, but if you ignite the imagination you will connect with your reader more and really bring your writing to life. It won't just be words on a page.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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The last line was very unexpected, but it is true. Who knows why we live? It could be simply to die, but things of that nature are never truely answered and people are left to fight wars in what they believe. There will never be that exact answer to fulfill everyone's need to know what their purpose is on this Earth. Good work.

"an oppertunity to joke and flashy" --- opportunity. And the word flashy really doesn't fit here.

"the Guid to the Galaxy" --- Guide.

"Some say love others say war " --- "Some say love, others say war".

"and then many others" -- this doesn't make sense. It seems to be incomplete. Try something like and there are many other excuses or something like that.

"So to the Ultimate qustion what is the answer" --- question. comma after question. question mark after answer.

"Its as simple as god almighty intends" --- It's as simple as God Almighty intends.

"Whats the meaning " --- What's.

Posted 14 Years Ago


The closing line, that is what this whole poem should be about. Here is my philosophical opinion, and then i will give you a more technical critique. Now, if you are going to write a piece on a philosophical topic, such as something incredibly debatable as the meaning of life, then damn well explore the topic! You were describing what people do in life, and then you go any say that the meaning of life is to die. So, maybe explore WHY people try to fill the void before they die. Are they searching for answers? Purpose (because to live to die goes against all instinct and what society feeds us). Explore the topics deeper, look at people, look at the whole. And then bring it back to the individual. What is death? is it the end? Or just a passing into another reality? Some may call it heaven/hell, the afterlife, or maybe like Richard Linklater suggested in Waking Life that you go into a lucid dream state. Basically in short, if you are going to write about such a topic, then really write about it.

As for style and flow, i think you need to develop your writing a little more. Instead of spoon feeding people, use images, feelings, senses, pictures. There are so many things people ignore when writing, but if you ignite the imagination you will connect with your reader more and really bring your writing to life. It won't just be words on a page.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

we live to die and die to live when it is our time theres nothing anyone can do

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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The Rose That Grew From Concrete
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My Name is Jason X and I'm a 17 year old guy born and raise in Fort Smith, Arkansas. I have a very imaginative and revolutionary mind. Please Comment more..

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