"our sky"

we often gaze at the blue texture over our heads......but least do we know the beautiful relationof its being with us human beings!

Untouchable, blue gray and red

without pillars it stands!

it often moans over the happenings below

and we witness the formation of clouds

the tears it sheds, we call it rain

it sprinkles snow,blessing every grain

the sun is its eye and the moon its candle 

rivers and oceans are caressed in its cradle!

the one who gazes at its unending spread

he hardly realises it is the medium of his bread!

the ugly black infinity, it saves us from

it has  millions of eyes, in the form of stars!

   Junaid altaf

Author's Note

would love to hear your valuable response............

Reviews

[Flutterby aish]

Wow this is really beautiful.........the way you have described it ...... it's great!!!!!! I guess you ponder really hard over things.......i mean........people look at the sky everyday bt who gives it much importance......bt the way you have put it all in a poem......It's AMAZING !!!!!!

[junaid altaf]

thank you so much aish.........

[Flutterby aish]

welcome!!! :)

[junaid altaf]

well come!

[Flutterby aish]

:D

[quinfinn]

this is almost perfectly worded, it sings of the many wonders and the depth, and expanse of the beauty of our skies. wonderful imagery and some really clever metaphor within. i have to say....this piece is resonant.

[junaid altaf]

thank u very much

[junaid altaf]

thank u very much

[quinfinn]

u r welcome!

[Frieda P]

This is very beautiful, I can imagine the scenic sky through your words.

I'd drop the 'got' in the last line, no need for it, and it ruins the rest of your beautiful write.

[junaid altaf]

thank u very much............got will just be removed

[Mehak Mushtaq]

This has got so much feel. Really nice.

[junaid altaf]

feeling is something which is the bitter reality but with a physical covering to shadow it..........

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Like soul? Then is soul a feeling? Perhaps yes.

[junaid altaf]

the biggest of all actually

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Hmmm.

[junaid altaf]

what doez it mean

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Made me think.

[junaid altaf]

so thats it.......

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Yes, you expect anything else?

[junaid altaf]

well expecting is nature

[Mehak Mushtaq]

It is, indeed.

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

Pure beauty in the ecumenical sense of the word.....
Wow! you even managed to rhyme it!
I must say that its one of the better works that i have seen recently!
Kudos!

[junaid altaf]

thanks homie.........

[Aehr]

wow i love this one. This is so beautifully described!

the sun is its eye and the moon its candle
rivers and oceans are caressed in its cradle!

This was my favourite part. I think you've done an excellent job. Short poems mean so much. you really gave me a lot to think about. :D

Shelving it!

[junaid altaf]

thank u very very much rhea........

[Aehr]

it was my pleasure, junaid :)

[OTownPete]

You have gathered up the immensity of the sky and placed here for us to touch and feel. Your friend in words, Pete

[junaid altaf]

thanks for your lovely words!

[Be myself!]

I like this. This is a very well written poem and it is so true! Good job

[junaid altaf]

thank you.........

[Be myself!]

your welcome

[Mark]

Very beautifully written. This piece is very expressive in its imagery. Nature is always something wonderful to behold.

[junaid altaf]

thanks mark

[Rick Puetter]

Dear junaid,

Another wonderful poem, My Friend. Congratulations. I love your observations on life. These are the observations of an aware and thinking man. Kudos.

Nicely constructed. Greatly enjoyed.

Best regards,

Rick

[junaid altaf]

thank you loads rick!