dark rose!

just a dark poem i wrote !

 

 

 

 

     first version 

 

 

     There's twelve red rose's that stands together,

Their holding on strong,

From the weather that has pasted us by,

Left by his sorrow,

He will always love her,

In the darkest hour,

Love has passed us by,

The light was to never shine again,

All hope was lost,

Our sorrows are weeping,

As the rose's turn dark,

We lay hopelessly in love,

Living day by day,

We lay hopelessly in fear and darkness,

As the rose's turn so black,

You can't see their beauty no more,

No hope,

All is gone,

In our darkest hour,

The dark rose,

Has stuck again.

Blood shed everywhere,

No one is safe anymore,

Love will never be the same

   second version 

   dark rose, 

there's twelve red rose's that stands together, 

their holding on strong, 

from the weather that has passed us by, 

left by his sorrows, 

he will always love her, 

in the darkest hour, 

love has passed us by, 

the light was to never shine again, 

all hope was lost, 

our sorrows are weeping, 

as the rose's turn dark, 

we lay hopelessly in love, 

living day by day, 

we lay hopelessly in fear and darkness, 

as the rose's turn so black, 

you cant see their beauty no more, 

no hope, 

all is gone, 

in our darkest hour, 

the dark rose, 

has struck again, 

blood shed everywhere, 

nobody's safe anymore, 

love will never be the same

Author's Note

well just a dark poem i wrote please tell me what you think

do you like the first version or the second version better

Reviews

[Ryan Henderson]

I like the dark mood in this poem, it is dark... Yet romantic... I like it...