Vampire's

Vampire poem hope you like it

    first version 

Vampire's lurking the night sky,

Looking for souls to steal,

They want your blood,

They want your soul,

They want to steal you away,

Vampire's like to play,

Play head games,

They are very seductive,

They lust upon your deep dark blood,

They thirst upon your blood,

SO if your out at night,

You better watch your back 

     second version 

  vampires

vampires lurking the night sky, 

looking for souls to steal, 

they want your soul, 

they want to steal you away in the darkest of the night, 

vampires like to play, 

playing head games is always fun, 

very seductive, 

they lust upon your deep dark blood, 

better be careful, 

going out at night, 

you better watch your back

Author's Note

hope you like this poem
let me know if you like the first version or the second version better

Reviews

[Inda]

i like it, feel like there's more to be said, here, then again i might just be over analyzing the piece.

[Emily]

'Play head games'
That part makes my hair stand up!
Well done, Keep it up!

[Baby Ricochet]

I've seen WAY to much vampire themed entertainment by default cause my girl's a vampire fanatic. Decent enough poem though.

[R Smith]

a poetic warning i think, sounds like you know all the vampire rules Jen, have you got inside info :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Short and to the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

Dark fun and very entertaining. Bravo.................

[Jamie]

Great poem :) Enjoyed it even more as I was watching Van Helsing whilst reading it, Great work!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Really enjoyed, Now I will not go alone at night anywhere lolz,
Good work, keep it up

[Eleanor]

Again, this was fun to read :)
The way you describe vampires and their actions is amazing. "Vampires" is definitely a different concept to write on. I'd love to learn it :p
Though I think you meant mind games?

Nice try :)

[Sindu]

Pretty straightforward prose! Strong warning- nothing mellow about it :)
Dud you mean 'mind games' ?