Nature Haiku

A Poem by Jason Galliger

inspired by my visit to Olympic National Park in Washington.

The mountain’s breath

Echoes through the forest sea

Animals bow

© 2010 Jason Galliger

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Scott Christian

Very nice. This made me think of the song "Tai Chan" by Rush. Haikus are not easy to write, but you seem quite adept at doing them just from this one piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Abdul Aziz

Cool haiku. I like it mate.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Dinesh Sairam

First and last lines have only 4 syllables. If you had planned it as a modern Haiku, it's OK. But I find the last line quite disturbing. Maybe it could be "Animals inhale" or "Animals survive" (As in, the animals survive on the breath of the mountains). I just loved "The mountain's breath", give me a fresh feel. :)

Keep writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago

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Added on July 17, 2010
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Jason Galliger

Fairfax, VA

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Hi I'm Jason a young writer from Virginia. I've been writing poetry and short stories for years. However, I've only shared my work with a small circle of friends and family. I hope to be published one.. more..