Nature's About to Bloom... Almost.

Nature’s About to Bloom... Almost.

 

Trees, flowers and fresh air

Everything, scarce.

 

Had been weary for a dogwood

But has been optimistic about its life.

 

You want to reach the apex

Of this mountain you’re about to climb.

 

But never had the guts

To share the emptiness you feel inside.

 

The nature’s about to bloom...

Almost.

 

Oblivious people wandering around

But nothing good to do about.

 

On the list, nature’s always been on queue

But have you reached it?

 

Water, ocean, fishes and reef

How beautiful to see.

 

Dolphin and whales,

Lingering in the sea.

 

Reefs in the ocean,

Oh, how lovely could it be?

 

The nature’s about to bloom...

Almost.

 

Frolicking over the greenest grass,

Trashes scattered.

 

Cloning non-stop on its soft surface,

Oh, how I hope we could subdue.

 

Storms, typhoons and tsunamis

Something sinister is about to happen.

 

Shivering by the cold brought by nature,

Distraction unearthed what have been wrong.

Serene and tranquilizing,

The earth has been an amazing gift to us.

 

But the humanity did something,

Which outraged the nature.

 

Mother Nature has something clever,

And leaves the people unaware.

 

Wistful of how to solve the problem,

They see the earth, tangled.

 

The nature’s about to bloom...

Almost.

 

So now I question,

Have you ever knew?

 

Now, I hope.

You make a sane move.

Author's Note

same old, note me of mistakes here..
so watcha think?
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Reviews

[Rene Velez]

visually striking, anything with nature involved draws me in, I like the construction and flow of this poem, very nice work Jhed

[Light and ashes]

I love this. I love how you tell about nature through its own views.
Examples: "Serene and tranquilizing, the earth has been an amazing gift to us."
"But humanity did something which outraged nature." "Mother nature has something clever, and leaves the people unaware."
These lines also create a nice cliff hanger which in this case is good, gives the reader enough of a thrill.
Very nice.

[Kevin Horsley]

The only mistake which stood out for me was:
Distraction unearthed what 'have' been wrong. Think you may have meant 'has'.

Other than this faux pas, it has wonderful imagery and is more an accusation of mans crimes against nature.
I do like the line: Mother Nature has something clever - and the lines which follow which allude to something but do not reveal.

[Kathryn]

I love the imagery and emotion in this :)
'They see the earth, tangled' is a brilliant line, and really set my mind whirring :) I love the style you've used, and may have to look through soem of your other work :)

[∂αʌ<..]

you start from a calm flow and then in the end...you placed some thought provoking questions as Joshua said!
amazing nature poem!

[joshua deathdealer]

Excellent thought provoking write!!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice work, nature is going to do us in.

[Hippy]

i like it nice picture too i felt it was going to be a happy mood at start like natures blooming right on but you threw me through a loop there and went on bout how people suck and are trashing our mother earth which does suck i agree

[☯]

A beautiful and mysterious write. A strong and thoughtful message about nature and beings that you've conveyed. An inspiring and heartwarming write. :)