Living in a Fantasy (Revised)

I revised the other one but it will remain there. I put this one into a song so I changed so much from the one before.

Living in a Fantasy

I'm standing in the center of the room

Reminiscing all the memories

As we watched and laughed under the moon

And we stayed that way like we've never felt more sure

You and I could build that very story

And in the end we'll end up happy

So baby, don't worry

We're living in a fantasy

We'll fly and chase those dreams we see

Without the touch of reality

So go on and show me

The words I hear that sound so real

You made me feel that my home is here

Even though I know

This is a fantasy

I stayed that way

And the hours just seem to pass

Ticking slowly,

Like your words would leave my grasp

I've waited for you so long

And the hours just seem to fear

I overheard you said

That I wouldn't shed a tear

You and I could build that very story

And in the end we'll end up happy

So baby, don't worry

We're living in a fantasy

We'll fly and chase those dreams we see

Without the touch of reality

So go on and show me

The words I hear that sound so real

You made me feel that my home is here

Even though I know

This is a fantasy

I saw you there, making your way to me

I walked away with the tears i have inside

Then I heard you call my name

And you held me in your arms, so tight

And we ended up in each other's heart tonight

So baby, don't worry

We're living in a fantasy

We'll fly and chase those dreams we see

Without the touch of reality

So go on and show me

The words I hear that so real

You made me feel that my home is here

Even though I know

This is a fantasy

Baby, don't worry

We're living in a fantasy

We'll fly and chase those dreams we see

Without the touch of reality

So go on and show me

The words I hear that sound so real

You made me feel that my home is here

Even though I know

This is a fantasy

Author's Note

So I revised "We're Living in a Fantasy" into "Living in a Fantasy" which turned out to be a song for my special someone. HAHAHA. I'm open for suggestions and clarifications. Reviews will be much appreciated! I hope you like this one.

Reviews

[Kenneth The Poet]

Exciting fantasy for sure.

[☯]

I really liked the flow and the rhythmical way it was written. Reading it myself I felt like I was living in a fantasy. I really liked the way this kept me reading, it almost felt like listening to a song, and it would become amazing song lyrics! I had a lot of favorite parts, but I really liked the line;
"And you held me in your arms, so tight
And we ended up in each other's heart tonight"
An amazing write, good job! :)

[Huggy Bear]

Great piece:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A touching setiment to be sure, well done, good read.

[Sweet Emotions]

I love how the last two lines of the chorus says "Even though I know this is a fantasy." This is a beautiful song, very emotional.

[Kathryn]

'We'll fly and chase those dreams we see
Without the touch of reality'
^ utterly loved those two lines :) Lovely read, I couldn't fault it if I tried ^^

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Felt like a song. I like the flow of words and thoughts. No weakness in the poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the way you use different fonts in a original way, and the song-like structure,would make this poem a good song, get a friend to sort out a few chords ! Good work.