Waiting is all I have

Waiting is all I have

A Poem by Akshat♥
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well waiting is never easy but when you do not have a choice.. you have to wait for it..

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Waiting is something too easy to say
quite callous to understand

Those feelings that I know you had for me
are dead
You crushed my heart like a cigarette

You said you loved me
You said you cared

But now I realized you are just a faker

So now I am left alone in your past

You left me down on a road of hatred

I am still waiting for you on my knees

I know you did not even care

I wish one day you will realize 
how easy it is to say no

When you are screwed from all sides
you only wish to be aside

Waiting is all I have
but remember you are in my thoughts

© 2013 Akshat♥


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Akshat♥
please give honest reviews as you always do...just rate it too
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i really liked the "crushed like a cigarette" line. definitely original. i've read a lot of "crushed hearts" lines but that was a first for me. I dig this. I've been there, man. Some people get off more just by f*****g with someones head than actually loving them. It's a type of abuse that most don't recognize because most only associate abuse with violence. That's not always the case. My best advice to you is to leave this person in the past. If they don't want you now... they probably never will. A harsh reality... but you deserve someone that instantly wants you forever, that love at first sight s**t. i hope you find someone that can make you happy. this person just sounds like they're making you cry. good luck in the future. i'll check out some more of your work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Akshat♥

9 Years Ago

I will try...Thank you...means a lot to me :)



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this is worth appreciating.....
waiting is all we cn do..
in case v are left in gloom n despair...
this is how we can express ourselves.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Akshat♥

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)
True. Sometimes waiting is all we have and it's so painful...
"You crushed my heart like a cigarette" reflects that broken heart and its pain. So well expressed.
I think "You left me down on a road of HATRED" would have been more appropriate.
It's a good piece and has been very well expressed. Write more. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Akshat♥

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)
nice portray of emotions.. touching...
waiting is really painful..

Posted 9 Years Ago


Akshat♥

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
I'm - not sure what the rating thing does. I'm very new here.

As for your poem, I can definitely see you are hurting and I am sorry for that. And I can't honestly say, 'we've all been there' because in truth we haven't.

Each of our pains and losses are unique to us and few can ever know - not really - what is going on in our heads.

Here's hoping better days ahead for you. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Akshat♥

9 Years Ago

THANK YOU DEAR :)
dw817

9 Years Ago

Ubetcha, take care ...
it was adventurous reading this....!!!
i could deeeeeeeeeeeeeply feel your thoughts in this work...
the best part about it is that although your life was disastered by that someone, but you still dare, not to say something really harsh in return.....!!
its reallly verrrrrry eloquent, and i heartly wish, that person soooon returns back to your life..!!
take care.....
regards,
saumya

Posted 9 Years Ago


Akshat♥

9 Years Ago

That person will never return!!
Thank you for the review :)
Saumya

9 Years Ago

:(
highly welcomed my friend..!!
Saumya

9 Years Ago

:(
highly welcomed my friend...!!
I really like the tone of this poem.. melancholy and pain. I know you use the word "hate" in the poem, but I don't feel any hate coming through in this poem. These two lines..

You crushed my heart like a cigarette
So now I am left alone in your past

...were really zingers for me. I think they really gave a nice visual aspect to the poem.

A few grammatical issues:

All you left me down on a road of hate (remove "All" and capitalize "You".. this makes the sentence flow better)

how easy is to say no ("how easy it is to say no" flows better and is correct grammar)

Overall, I think this is a passionate poem with lots of good images and visuals. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Akshat♥

9 Years Ago

Thank you dear :)
You always give me strength :)
Emotional write...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Akshat♥

9 Years Ago

Thank you dear :)
A nice write...but I don't think I agree...I mean what's the point in waiting for someone who don't give a dam about us? It's there loss not ours..

Posted 9 Years Ago


Dakshta

9 Years Ago

Ok are you serious? I mean...those people are past amd we can make new memories by new moments that .. read more
Akshat♥

9 Years Ago

i agree with you...but some people like good friends or our grand parents...
we love them too .. read more
Dakshta

9 Years Ago

Yes they do :)
'Those feelings that I know you had for me
are dead'

Ahh..!! That line just Breaks my heart.... All in all quite a remarkable piece :)
I second Nupur's thought :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Akshat♥

9 Years Ago

it is sad i know but life goes on so does the people who we used to know ..if u like it or not ...th.. read more
smilempsn

9 Years Ago

hmm :| Bitter Truth..!!
judge it :P

Posted 9 Years Ago



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